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    D3 Story: The Mage Academy of Gea Kul

    Note: This novella is set in the Diablo 3 world, around the time of events in the game. Refer to the world map for place locations such as Gea Kul. Some artistic liberties have been taken with spells, characters, and other game functions. The story will be presented in 3 parts, since it's quite long (~27k words). Some author's notes will follow. Comments/critiques/flames are welcome.



    The Destruction, Betrayal, and Ultimate Resurrection of the Mage Academy of Gea Kul

    Prologue


    As darkness fell, I found myself sitting shoulder to shoulder with four of my fellow mages. We had food, but ate little. We had wood, but burned only enough to keep the campfire alight. We had words, but did not share them, for each man was lost in his own thoughts. I knew the others were thinking about the day's toils, the blood that warfare had left on our hands, and the grim deeds that awaited us on the morrow. It is a terrible task to contemplate, to think of the men and demons we will have to cut through in pursuit of a wayward initiate, but it must be done.

    Though I believe that this is my last night among the living, I do not believe in fate. This tragedy was not preordained by some cruel god; some roll of the cosmic bones. This end was not inevitable. It could have been avoided, and Zia, the strongest student to ever pass through the Academy at Gea Kul would still be enrolled there, learning and prospering, rather than almost single-handedly turning back the largest invasion of demons in remembered history, while a death squad of her former instructors closes in from behind. A death squad of which I am the leader. A death squad that will surely overtake her tomorrow, though I would not care to bet on who will be the dealer, and who the receiver, of that death.

    Five against one should be sure odds, even amidst the demonic war that rages around us, but our quarry has thrived in a land that few survive, she travels with powerful allies, and she has mastered spells never taught in the Academy of which I was formerly the Archmaester. Catch Zia we will, but I know not whether we will hold this tiger by the tail, or the jaws, and after dwelling on such thoughts all day, I can endure them no longer. Therefore I cast them back, retreating into my memories, for if I can not see clearly the future, I can at least relive the past.


    Chapter One


    From the first day of Zia's arrival at the mage academy in Gea Kul, she was remarkable. Her beautiful face, her youthful vigor, her astonishing inherent talent; all gleamed like diamonds in the sun. More than those traits, there was something entrancing about her, a shining clarity to her personality that made her unforgettable to all, whether they were friend or foe. And yes, she had friends in those early days -- do not allow the slanders that sprang up after her abrupt and deadly departure obscure that fact. Zia was a friendly, cheerful girl, one who was unfortunately and tragically unaware of the power she wielded in every laugh and toss of her shining hair.

    Her radiance, her attraction, came entirely from within. Her clothing was plain, and there was certainly nothing notable about her pedigree. In an academy full of princesses, lordlings, and the children of nobles and powerful merchants, Zia was a pauper. She hailed from an obscure village on the edge of the Southern jungles, the daughter of wool merchants who had scarcely been able to afford her passage to Gea Kul. She had only enough gold for her first year's tuition, and could not afford robes, books, reagents, or a better quality of food than that provided to the servants.

    None of those facts ever dissuaded her in the slightest, nor did much else make an impression on her perpetually sunny disposition. Some attributed this to a mental defect, an inability to grasp the gravity of difficult situations, but I came to see things differently. I believed then, and still do, that Zia simply chose to ignore such obstacles. She focused all of her indomitable will on the problems she could surmount, on the spells and lore she was set to learn, and let other issues take care of themselves.

    Which they did, to a remarkable extent. For better and for worse.

    She made her mark during her first week at the Academy, a time when most new students are content, even grateful, to remain ensconced in their rooms in the novice dormitory. Zia studied; she learned more than the rest of the novices combined, while also appearing at the center of every event in the Academy. She'd ridden to the Academy in a small wagon with two other students, both of whom were years older than her, and quite experienced with magic in their own ways. During the long journey Zia had picked their brains for every bit of lore and witchery they possessed, and though none of it was proper magecraft, she absorbed it at once and somehow applied it to her formal learning.

    First year students have few regular classes, and much of their time out of their rooms is spent in study sessions with older students, who point them to the books they must learn before they can progress to any proper spell casting. Most novices are hardly seen for six months, so buried are they in remedial reading and solitary practice as they attempt to master the basic incantations.

    Zia studied as much as anyone, but somehow contrived to be out and about as well. I saw her reading at meals, and even while walking through the hallways. Twice I saw her literally walk into another student, so absorbed was she in the book she was holding before her face. No one took offense, and it seemed like the other students, males especially, were flattered by the collisions. Part of it was Zia's clothing; though she wore the novice robes she'd been presented, and seemed utterly without concern for her appearance, she maintained an erotic aura. Her clothing was either too loose or too tight, often at the same time. Parts of her swelling anatomy were hugged most provocatively, even as her robes seemed about to fall off her slender shoulders. Like all student robes hers was hooded, but the cloth never seemed to obscure the view of her long, graceful neck, an expanse of skin more sensual than another woman's complete nudity. Zia was striking in any garment, almost enchanting, with her perpetual open-mouthed smile, flashing white teeth, and dancing blue eyes.

    I found cause to speak with her on several occasions during those first few days, and after no more than a few seconds looking into her eyes, I always found my thoughts wandering into most unsuitable areas; especially unsuitable given my position as Arch Maester. My thoughts for Zia were never erotic; I never allowed myself to fall prey to that temptation. Not sexual, but protective. Though she was in no danger within the fortified walls of the Academy, I felt a compulsion to guard over her and to keep her from harm's way.

    I took special pains to protect all the students, of course. Decades past, during my early years as a student, a rather aggressive mentality had permeated the Academy, and there were dangerous magical competitions and ruthless hazing rituals which resulted in numerous injuries, several deaths, and the premature departure of a number of promising, but less assertive, students. I had put an end to such practices once I became the Archmaester, and had made the protection and cultivation of the students my utmost priority. Before Zia's arrival, I'd never felt such a personal bond. She was a pupil, entrusted body and mind to the Academy I had been elected to direct, but at the same time she was a daughter, or at least a younger sister, to me. I would have moved mountains for her, and wreaked a terrible vengeance upon anyone who tried to harm her.

    And yet, in the end I was the one who harmed her the most cruelly. Not directly, but by inaction. Blinded by my infatuation, I allowed the situation to grow untenable, and for that I hope Zia can forgive me. Even if she must grant that forgiveness with my hands around her throat.


    Chapter Two


    I first witnessed a miracle from her hands on just her fifth day at the Academy. As I said, new students were seldom seen out of their quarters during their first months, except at mealtimes, when they could be seen scurrying towards the kitchen, dazed or panicked expressions on their faces. Zia was different, for in addition to her insatiable reading, she desired to see actual magic performed, and was bold enough to seek it out.

    I was leading a class on elemental fire enchantments class that fifth morning, filling in for a Maester who had fallen ill. As I carefully explained the physical motions, ritual incantations, and mental state required to call forth flame from a dry patch of sand, I became aware that Zia was standing in the rear of the class, her shimmering blue eyes somehow brighter and more insistent of my attention than the eyes of the two dozen third rank students filling the front rows of the large hall.

    I'd instructed nearly every course in the Academy, I'd demonstrated magery before kings and sultans, and I'd cast spells to save my life in battle, conjuring frantically with my very soul hanging in the balance. Yet I'd seldom felt as self conscious as I did once I noticed Zia's presence. I managed not to botch the spell or the lesson, I was too accomplished for that, but as the students paired off and arranged themselves around the large stone room, wands in hand and piles of sand under foot, Zia tiptoed out from the shadows, meeting me near the rear entrance, now bolted shut as a form of protection against the powerful magics being unleashed in this classroom.

    "If I correctly understood your fascinating lesson, Archmaester Yun, the key is to know the elemental nature of flame, and to call it forth. Almost like summoning a trained animal. The flame is not any bear. The flame is one particular bear. With a unique name you must find in your own mind, that will forever link you to the flame. Yes?"

    I'd never heard it described in such a fashion, and the directness of her words almost startled me, but after a moment's thought I realized that yes, she had cut straight to the heart of the matter. And with far more precision than any other student in the class could have mustered. Calling forth flame, and maintaining it without any substance for kindling, was one of the more difficult tests of pure magery, but at that moment I found myself foolishly sure that Zia was up to it.

    Stirred, I made the first of my many mistakes with that girl. I decided to challenge her.

    "Take this wand. Concentrate on that sand. And call forth your bear."

    I handed her the simple wooden wand I used for instruction, turned her by the shoulders to face the patch of sand I'd used for my own demonstration a moment before, and waited. As the seconds passed, I realized that I was too close. My hands were hovering, almost trembling, above her delicate shoulders, and my hip was nearly touching hers. I was too close for propriety, and certainly too close to a very raw mage, one I was pushing to cast a spell she had no business attempting for another three or four years.

    In fact, I belatedly realized that I hadn't even given her a spell. Fire magery is learned in stages, with the aid of cheats and trickery. Students first learn simple feits, ways to create sparks, ways to charm wood to burn more quickly than natural, that sort of thing. Actually calling forth the essence of flame, without working up to it via baby steps, was unheard of. Yet just as I realized my mistake, and opened my mouth to correct it, Zia thrust the wand forward, her face tight with concentration as she cried out a single word.

    "Ursalia!" she shouted, and with that came a roar of flame, as a single white geyser roared forth from the sand, crackling in the air so loudly that every eye was drawn to Zia's enchantment.

    "Impossible!" hissed the stunned voice of a male student, a young man in his sixth year at the Academy. I might have echoed that sentiment, but my attention was entirely on Zia, rather than the remarkable flame she was nurturing. Her jaw was jutting forward, her teeth were clenched, and yet her beauty was undiminished. When she spoke, after several seconds of maintaining the flame, she moved only her lips, keeping her eyes focused on the elemental eruption her iron will was maintaining control over.

    "Archmaester Yun." She said, her voice calm and strong. I did not reply at once, my attention too occupied by her remarkable magery. After a short pause, she continued. "I have called forth my bear, and her power is great. How do I dispel her?"

    I almost laughed, embarrassment and amazement warring within me. A moment later my emotions turned to puzzlement, and then to fear, as I more carefully examined the enchantment Zia held before her. She had not created a flame, and nurtured it with her spellcraft. She had unleashed the essence of fire, the elemental might that surrounds us at all times. Simply touching that level of magery was the work of a lifetime, and this slip of a girl had done it without the slightest idea what she was doing. More than that, she'd found some way to harness the flame within a protective shield.

    It was a good thing she had. This was not a magical demonstration; this was the edge of an apocalypse. If her control slipped, the fire would not fail, since she was not causing it to burn. She was restraining the elemental force, like a damn holding back the ocean. If Zia's control failed, the flames would erupt, filling this room, and perhaps the entire Academy, with flaming destruction. This should not have been possible. I could not have done what this girl had done. No more than a handful of living mages could have, and I was not sure any would have dared attempt it, save while standing on an island in the center of the ocean, with the salvation of deep blue water at their heels.

    I let none of those thoughts taint my voice, which I forced to remain calm and soothing. "Speak to it again, Zia. Think of the essence of the flame, as you did before you called it forth. Push it away. Push it back into the elemental plane from which it came. Order it by name."

    Despite my tone, which must have sounded like the voice a man uses to calm a startled horse, I was awash with anxiety. If Zia lost control, I did not think I could dispel the elemental might the girl had loosed. Not without enchanted armor and weaponry to enhance my powers, and perhaps not even then. I was not frightened, but I was definitely anxious. Zia was neither. She was never afraid, not then, and not at any other time I knew her. If I was trying to calm anyone's fear, it was my own.

    She followed my instructions, of course. She always followed them, even to her eventual doom, and in just seconds the fire began to fade before the might of her soft voice and the wooden wand I'd so cavilerly handed to her. The flame did not decrease in heat or intensity; and even when the fire was no taller than one of the first green sprouts of spring, it continued to burn with a white heat sufficient to melt through stone. Zia did not diminishing its power, since no one could do that. She simply forced it back into the elemental ether, pushing it down until it winked out and left the room in what seemed, for a moment, like darkness.

    Shaking her hands and shrugging her shoulders, Zia whirled towards me, excitement gleaming on her face. "That was wonderful, Archmaester Yun! I'd never before felt such power! Might I attend your class again next week? I'm doing as much reading as I can, but I've worked through most of the first year books already, and all that endless theory and memorization is so dreary. I want to learn true magery. I want to understand the manipulation of elemental forces! Not just slight of hand tricks to fool peasants and princes!"

    Flabbergasted, I could only nod and take back my wand when she held it out to me. If I'd been honest, I could have told her that she had nothing else to learn from this class. That she'd demonstrated a mastery quite beyond what I expected of any of the third levels I was teaching, all of them fifth and sixth year students. But I couldn't say that, not to a brand new student, and besides, I very much wanted to see more of her. More of her amazing natural talent for magery, I told myself at the time, but in retrospect, I must drop that pretense. I wanted to see more of Zia, whether or not she was holding a wand in her small hand. I certainly did all I could to see more of her as she gave a little hop to get going, then fairly danced out of class, her narrow hips swaying beneath her robe in most enticing fashion. At that moment, I decided that I would give Maester Dolcient as much time as she needed to recover her health and return to instructing this class.

    Looking around the classroom at the paltry efforts of the older students, I caught a few of them flicking glances towards me, and remembered myself. I moved at once, strolling around the room, inspecting their progress and offering suggestions as needed. While I instructed them, I tried to gauge the mood of the students. I was fairly sure none were advanced enough to sense the true force of Zia's magery, and in fact, I rather hoped they had not. All rumors spread wildly in the Academy, and I could only imagine the wild stories that would spring up if word got around that a novice, eighteen years old, virtually untrained, was capable of working a sorcery that could have destroyed this room, the palace that housed the Academy, and perhaps consumed all of Gea Kul as well.


    Chapter Three


    My hopes were in vain, for that class was not the only one Zia paid a visit to during her first weeks at the Academy. By the end of her first month the girl's prowess at all forms of magery was practically the sole topic of conversation between the Maesters, and wild stories about Zia were already spreading through the student body. I saw another example of her might not long afterwards, though that one was witnessed second hand.

    I was working in my office one afternoon during Zia's fifth week at the Academy when Maester Shien, one of my oldest and dearest friends, burst through the door. Her robes were soaking wet and she was shivering hard enough to set the ice crystals in her hair to shaking, but there was such a fierce light in Shien's eyes that I dared not speak. Instead I ushered the woman to the fireplace, tossed two fresh logs onto the glowing embers, and hurried to fetch a towel and robe from my bath.

    By the time I returned the logs were blazing, no doubt assisted by some subtle magic from Maester Shien, and she had removed her sodden outer robe and hung it beside the hearth. I did not avert my eyes, but neither did let my eyes linger over the anatomy revealed by Shien's thin and clinging slip. We'd been students together not so long ago, advancing together through the sixth, seventh, and eight ranks as we moved towards Maester status, and had therefore witnessed each other's ceremonial rituals. These trials were solemn and ritualistic events at which students demonstrated their competence, skill, and devotion to the Academy. They were not pleasant experiences for the aspirants, and amongst the various ordeals was a walk through walls of fire and ice, while wearing nothing but the brands and tattoos that marked our allegiance to the Academy.

    During those trials I had seen Shien nude on several occasions, but viewing her during such a ceremony was very different than seeing her shivering in my private office. I therefore turned my back to give her some privacy while she threw off her soaked slip, briskly dried herself, and pulled on robe I'd brought her. It fit her about as well as an ogre's tunic would have fit me, for Shien was nearly as petite as Zia herself, but it was warm and dry, and after a few minutes gazing into the flames, Shien perched on a bench near the hearth and began to speak.

    "That girl is inscrutable. Her powers..." Maester Shien trailed off for a moment, her eyes returning to the flames. When she spoke again, her voice was low and thoughtful. "I have never felt such might, such raw strength. She does not learn the beginner spells. She does not nibble at the apple. She swallows it whole, and opens rifts in the elemental flows that pass all around us. I fear for her every time she casts a spell, and yet the danger of allowing her to proceed without training is unthinkable."

    Even back in her student days, Shien had been prone to grand metaphors and abstract notions, sometimes to the vexation of her classmates. This time though, I could tell that she was not attempting to becloud the issue. She simply could not describe her feelings about Zia in plain terms. I understood her difficulty, for although I hardly knew the girl at that point, I already felt conflicted about her talent, personality, and appearance.

    I let Shien be for a few minutes, before prodding her with a direct inquiry. "What did Zia do in your class? How did you come to be soaked by ice water?"

    Shien raised one hand to her chin, then rubbed it over her still-wet face, the dark red tattoos across the back of her left hand visible in the firelight. She closed her eyes as if to gather her thoughts, and began speaking without re-opening them. Her words were slightly disjointed, a sign her scattered thoughts.

    "I was instructing a class of fourth levels. Theory and practice of ice spells. Zia and a pair of Firsts were watching from the back, but I paid little mind. Younger students always seek a glimpse at the icy enchantments. They watched my instruction. Only when I turned the Fourths loose to attempt to ice the chandeliers did I walk to the guests."

    She trailed off there, and as I joined her in looking at the crackling fire, I remembered teaching such classes myself. Fourth level students were generally in their seventh or eighth year at the Academy, and had mastered all of the elementary magics, but were just beginning to tap into the higher powers. Fourths needed to learn the basics of summoning water and chilling it, as well as exercising full control over all types of ice; from firing single bolts to freezing distant targets and controlling small bodies of water. Ice and water were closely linked, and the higher level ice spells were much the same as basic water summoning, with the added difficult of imparting sub-zero temperatures and precisely targeting the resulting ice.

    I was pulled out of my musings when Shien continued. "The pair of Firsts had the usual questions. How cold was the ice, could it so solidly freeze a demon that it would shatter when struck, and so on. Zia had no such questions. She merely watched as the Fourths failed at their spells. When I asked her what she saw, she spoke slowly, her eyes never leaving the students behind me.

    "She said that the students were too timid, that they were not opening themselves to the water elements, and thus their puffs of cold air had nothing to act upon. She said she understood how to bring forth the water, and that our method of cooling it seemed very imprecise. She asked me if I'd ever assigned the students Radominich's treatise on the elements."

    I blinked in surprise when Shien named that work, for Radominich's writings were widely condemned, if not outright banned. He'd postulated radical theories, methods of converting substances with magery that were thought unsavory. Unnatural. Highly dangerous. I wondered, as Shien must certainly have, where Zia had seen such material. The Academy had copies of all of Radominich's works in the Great Library, but they were locked away in the special section, out of reach of fourth ranks, much less a neophyte like Zia.

    "I did not challenge her about Radominich." said Shien. "Instead I told her that yes, ice spells were just water spells with cold temperatures, and that they were fairly simple to cast, once the student could make herself believe that it was possible to freeze the water before it appeared.

    "Zia grasped the concept. She nodded at me, muttered something about 'anti-fire' and then asked if she could try.

    "I was curious, and gestured for her to proceed. She gave me a bow, walked into the center of the room, under the high dome, and stood with her arms extended overhead. The Fourths stopped to look, the few icicles they'd managed to form dripping overhead. Zia had no wand. She had no focus device at all, and yet after a few seconds, water came from above. Water, as though we were standing beneath a lake. Water so cold it burned.

    "The Fourths who were in the open scattered. Others stood open mouthed. Amidst the gasps, I heard Zia. 'Colder.' she said, and at once it was. I felt the chill in the air, like a doorway to winter had been opened overhead. The water froze at once, and huge chunks of ice came slamming down, breaking on the floor like dropped plates.

    "Those stopped after a few seconds, and then Zia was standing in a blizzard. I could hardly see her, the flakes were so thick. They were gusting, as icy air swirled down from above. I ran towards the girl, my hair blowing behind me. I did not feel the cold. I did not realize I was soaked with water from her first attempt. I could only think of the fire she summoned in your class, that first week."

    Maester Shien was one of the few to whom I'd related that story, and I nodded when she mentioned it. I don't think she saw me; she'd remained facing into the fireplace during her entire story, and she was still sitting as near as she could without catching on fire.

    "I was afraid that she might have opened a rift to some arctic realm, some icy hell, and through it might enter something far worse than a chilling draft. Happily, she had not, and as I kicked through knee deep snow to reach her, Zia waved her arms and ended the summoning. As the flakes drifted down she looked into my eyes, and hers were glowing. The whites were... changed. Almost silver. I could not speak, but when she blinked the color was gone.

    "I congratulated her, then raised my voice and shouted to the others that class was over. I told them to hurry and dry off, a command that Zia took to heart. She was happy, so happy. Her smile broader than ever, she bowed, thanked me, and ran towards the rear door. She skipped as she went. I waited a moment, to be sure that she'd left no lingering forces in the air, but once the last of the snow had fallen and I saw only the ice-crusted chandeliers, I realized how cold I was. And I hurried to your office, Archmaester Yun."

    I did not know what to say, about Zia's display or Shien's final remark. I tried to make a joke, about how the Archmaester's office was much closer to her classroom than Shien's own quarters. Shien didn't laugh, but she did look at me, finally taking her eyes off of the flames. They were piercing, and she looked haunted by what she'd seen that afternoon.


    Chapter Four


    Similar tales came to my ears from other Maesters, and while we compared them with each other and marveled at Zia's skills and potential, we were stupidly careless about controlling the rumors. For this I blame myself. I felt nothing but awe and admiration for Zia, to the point that I sometimes found myself daydreaming about the legends she would create, once she grew into her full power. Foolishly, I imagined that others would share my reaction; that the students would be proud to know her and the Maesters honored to have instructed her.

    It wasn't long before the folly of my expectations started to become clear. In just her second month at the Academy grumblings began to be heard from the students -- whispers that Zia must be receiving special favors and extra instruction to have progressed so rapidly. These complaints increased over time, and worse, some of the Maesters began to show an unwarranted dislike for the girl. Zia was too perfect; too beautiful, too quick, too cheerful. Her magical progression was effortless, her potential was boundless, and some of the less-gifted Maesters, men and women who had scratched and clawed for decades to pass the higher level proficiencies, felt threatened; jealous of a neophyte who already possessed greater power than they themselves could ever hope to manifest.

    I did have some success in heading off that sort of foolishness amongst the Maesters. I reminded them that our loyalty was to our discipline and to the Academy, and that it was our duty and privilege to educate those who would one day surpass and replace us. Besides, Zia's talents were inherent; she could not have taught them if she'd tried. Furthermore, I'd never seen a student whose future I was more certain lay outside of the Academy.

    "Augustus!" I joked with one aged and embittered Maester. "You can't think a girl of her age is going to take your position? Even were she not destined win great battles and bring glory to our discipline, she's not yet turned nineteen. You're safe for another dozen years at least!"

    Augustus would never react to any sort of humor, but he and the other Maesters I spoke to seemed slightly assuaged. What I didn't think to address was the grousing from students, and the vulnerability of my fellow Maesters to petty remarks and rumor mongering. Most tragic of all, I was the source of many of the worst rumors, however inadvertently.

    By her third month at the Academy, I'd taken to working personally with Zia, one evening a week. It was a natural arrangement; I had the time since as the Archmaester I did not teach any regular classes, and I missed working directly with the students. I also happened to be especially skilled at the one aspect of magery that Zia found most difficult to master; transformation and teleportation. The girl's personality was too strong, her will too powerful. She had great difficulty in sublimating herself into any sort of transformation, and allowing herself to dissolve completely, as was required to teleport, was nearly impossible for her.

    My tutoring sessions with her soon became the highlight of my week, and while I told myself that my interest was purely professional, I will admit to rather savoring the grateful hug she gave me before and after each class. I sometimes found my eyes wandering, for Zia usually removed her novice robe while she practiced teleportation in the warm outer room of my office. I'd attended to queens and royal mistresses who could not pull the eye as this girl did, even dressed in nothing more revealing than tights and a well-worn tunic.

    I taught her as best I was able, and never let my wandering eyes linger, but I was ever conscious of the fact that novices sometimes teleported right out of their clothing, as they struggled to learn to control their bodies and garments at the same time. The thought of the upcoming rank promotion ritual also entered my head from time to time, since I was certain Zia would be moving up to at least the first level. Like all students at the trials, she would have to demonstrate her magical competence, and do so without any aids, or even clothing of any kind. Such ceremonies were always well-attended by Maesters and older students, but I knew the first one Zia took part in would strain the seating of the lower amphitheater.

    Still, though my thoughts sometimes strayed, our interactions were without fault. Zia's beauty was without equal in the Academy or all of Gea Kul, and she was possessed of a most captivating personality. But I never did more than pat her on the shoulder, or return the embraces she enthusiastically initiated. It was hard not to touch her; Zia was irrepressibly friendly, and never shy about showing her affection with physical gestures. What I should have realized was that not all men were as disciplined as me, and that Zia was all too forgiving of their trespasses -- a combination of traits that had earned her an undeserved reputation as a tease and a temptress. It was unfair, but what were young men to think when she embraced them freely, pressing her firm breasts into their chests and never admonishing them for daring to pinch her behind while she delivered them a kiss on the cheek?

    Worse than overly-friendly men were the others of Zia's gender. Female students were a minority in the Academy, but they were as tough or tougher than their male counterparts, and they did not take to Zia. For all her friendliness, the other women could not ignore the effect she had on men. How were they to feel when every man in the school openly lusted after her? For her part, Zia was innocent in thought and deed. What must have seemed friendly gestures to her were turned, by rumors and innuendo, into seductive subterfuge.

    By the time that Zia was half a year into her training, we Maesters had given up any thought of holding her to a usual schedule. She'd mastered all of the elementary techniques within weeks of her arrival at the Academy, and her raw abilities were mighty enough to beggar every Maester in the school. I'd consulted with several of the elders and devised a highly modified program for Zia, one that would allow her the freedom to continue stretching her abilities, while forcing her to learn the basics. I put a special importance on increasing her mental control. As powerful as she was, the danger was in her overdoing it burning herself out, if not unleashing destruction upon us all.


    Chapter Five


    In retrospect, it's surprising that events took so long to turn ugly. After all, I had mismanaged nearly every aspect of Zia's education. I'd failed to quash the cruel rumors, I'd put the girl on a special instructional program without ever explaining it to her fellow students, and I'd expected understanding and approval from my fellow Maesters, knowing they could not be relied upon to agree on the color of the sky from one moment to the next. Worst, I'd entirely underestimated the power of jealousy, envy, and wishful thinking. I did sometimes worry about how well Zia was fitting in, but I was kept so busy administering the Academy, jousting politically with the nobles and royalty of Gea Kul, and overseeing the deliveries of food and other supplies, that I neglected my uppermost duty. To instruct and protect the students.

    During the ninth and tenth months of Zia's presence, I began to hear regular reports of quarrels amongst the students. These were not unheard of; the students at the Academy were brilliant, driven, and highly-competitive, and the advancement exams were brutal. It was not uncommon for less than a third of the students in a given rank to survive the grueling trials and move up a level, with the failure rate increasing at the higher ranks. Under those circumstances, it was only natural that their tension spilled over into occasional conflict, but so long as none of the students broke the rules about using magery outside of a supervised classroom situation, and no one was badly injured, the incidents were overlooked.

    I should have realized that the conflicts were more frequent than usual, and that most of them were motivated by the same thing; men clashing over their delusions about Zia. Most of the male students had convinced themselves that Zia had romantic feelings for them, that she meant something special by the embraces she had bestowed upon them, and that it was only a matter of time until their friendship took a more passionate turn. Most of the female students were sure that Zia was sleeping with a different male student every day, and spending her nights engaged in carnal relations with the Maesters. I'm less sure how the Maesters felt, but I know there was no shortage of infatuations with Zia amongst them, and that many suspected their fellows of taking highly inappropriate liberties with the girl. Liberties they themselves were too noble and chivalrous to pursue.

    None of it made any sense, and if I'd looked more closely at my own highly conflicted feelings for the girl I might have gained some valuable insight. I did not, sadly. Not until many months later, when disastrous events made such an analysis as unavoidable as it was overdue.

    At the time though, nearly one year into Zia's time at the Academy, I felt that I had things under control.

    I'd been moving Zia around regularly, not allowing her to stay too long in any class or with any Maester. This seemed to be working; no one spent enough time with her to grow truly obsessed. Well, almost no one. I spent an hour or two with her every week, tutoring her on the teleportation techniques she still found elusive, and helping to supplement her education in any other necessary areas. Zia learned at amazing speed, absorbing information from books nearly as readily as the scholarly Maester Shien, but her youth, inexperience, and the short time she'd spent at the Academy handicapped her in some areas.

    With the wisdom of hindsight, I've come to believe that my educational approach was all wrong. While Zia was brilliant and quick to learn, she was also afflicted with a short attention span. Other than the teleportation, which she'd worked doggedly at for months, she tended to learn things almost at once, and then move on to something new. This had given her a massive amount of knowledge, but no mastery, and no deeper understanding of any aspects of magery. Furthermore, by popping her from class to class so often, she met all of the students and Maesters, but did not spend much time with any of them. As a result she was known by everyone, but understood by no one. Perhaps only I, out of the entire Academy, knew how many doubts she felt about her skills, or understood how hard she worked and how important the magery was to her. Everyone else simply saw a beautiful young girl who was perfect at everything and who was given all sorts of special privileges by the Archmaester. No amount of smiling and friendliness from Zia could offset the general impression that she was spoiled, pampered, and specially groomed for success.


    Chapter Six


    The troubles began with a small argument in the kitchen. From what I learned after the fact, Zia was reading while carrying a plate to her table, when she bumped into Grace, a sixth level female student. No real harm was done, and Zia immediately apologized, but Grace had had a very rough morning in a conjuring class, and had quarreled with her boyfriend. Who, she rightly suspected, had something of a crush on Zia. In that mood Grace was unforgiving, and after raising her voice, she slapped Zia, scratched her face, seized her by the hair, and spun her into a wall, while dozens of students watched, cheering on the fight.

    Three Maesters intervened, sending Zia to her quarters and Grace to Maester Shien for punishment. If that had been the end of it, things might have blown over. Zia, however, was not so easily dismissed. She'd been too shocked to fight back at the time, but once she was alone in her small room in the novices' dormitory, she began to simmer. Literally simmer; I responded to the frantic summons of a pair of Fifths who saw waves of heat glowing from the walls.

    The door into the novice dormitory was too hot to touch, and wasting no time, I blasted it open with several frost spells. The great room beyond was as hot as an oven, and I took a moment to hurl a winter's worth of snow and ice into the glowing maw before I dared enter. Within I found two unconscious novices sprawled on a wooden table, the legs of which had been charred black from the heat rising from the floor.

    The boys were covered by the snow I'd created, though it was already turning to slush on the burning floor, and hot gusts of air were blowing out from the creaking doors that led to private bedrooms. I wasted no time in seizing them and teleporting out into the hallway, depositing them in the arms of the older students who had gathered. Returning at once to the dormitory, I threw blasts of ice in every direction, blasting open the doors that were billowing open and closed like the bellows of a blacksmith's furnace. One door remained shut, and sent enough ice to shatter it. Through the broken wood I saw Zia, sitting on a smoldering bed, her head in her hands, her body literally glowing with heat.

    She was unaware of my presence, and even as I filled her room with ice, literally coating the floor and furnishings, she remained motionless. Picking my way carefully over the jagged, melting ice that covered the floor, I made sure my hands were well shielded by a layer of ice before I dared touch the girl. She was unresponsive but malleable, and when I lifted up her head I saw her eyes glowing silver. She did not react in any way, not even when I scooped her up into my arms.

    It was a mark of my concern that I did not revel in the feeling of her petite body against my chest. Standing up, I saw Maester Jennin, who must have entered the dormitory while I was approaching Zia. His eyes were wide, and when he spoke he was almost sputtering. "Such heat, coming from her. Without casting a spell! And her eyes! Were they not silver?"

    I did not answer him, merely gestured for him to follow me as I raced down the hallway, teleported into the main gallery, and then up to the highest furnished level of the great palace that housed our Academy. I chose that level since a large and private Maester's lounge was located there, and I did not want any students or servants intruding at that point. Few Maesters were there at that hour, and I left Zia under the watchful eyes of Maesters Jennin and Shien, two of the few I could trust to keep quiet and to control her heat with powerful ice enchantments, if necessary. Zia was no longer glowing like a stone pulled from a fire, and remained motionless and silent when I laid her down on a couch, but I feared that she might still be highly agitated, and thus prone to another outburst of heat.


    Chapter Seven


    Long conferences ensued after the event, meetings of exactly the sort I least enjoyed. One of my main goals as Archmaester had been to reduce the endless bickering and tedious discussions that had formerly characterized so much of the day to day management of the Academy. Not every Maester needed to weigh in on every issue. Especially not those who simply enjoyed the sound of their own voices. In my first year as Archmaester I'd implemented a token system, where each Maester was given five coins before any meeting. They had to spend one each time they wished to speak, an expense that gave even the most congenital windbags pause for thought.

    No coins were passed out before the discussions of "The Burning Girl," as some of the Maesters took to calling the incident with Zia, and if they had been I would have needed to empty the Academy's treasury to support the debate. Every Maester talked, and talked, and talked, turning over this particular event, and digressing to discuss the whole improbable year Zia had spent at the Academy. My instructional methods were criticized, cutting accusations of impropriety were hurled in every direction, and there was widespread disagreement about what to do next. To my surprise though, the biggest point of contention was what sort of spell Zia had used to broil her classmates.

    Both novices had survived without any permanent scarring, and neither could say what had happened. They'd entered their dormitory, noticed that the floor was scorching, leapt onto a table, and not awakened until they were being carried to the infirmary, ice dripping from their blistered bodies.

    The clear and unequivocal testimony of myself and Maester Jennin was examined from every direction, as though our words had been found in some ancient text, and were subject to interpretation.

    "There was no flame!" Jennin repeated for the tenth time, only the restraining arms of two other Maesters holding him back from storming around the table and physically assaulting the badgering and frankly disbelieving Maester Gutherie.

    "So says your report," said Gutherie, his voice as precise and annoying as ever, "And yet there is no known form of magery that can create such heat without it. Perhaps the girl had summoned forth a great flame, only to dispel it just before you entered the dormitory?"

    Jennin mopped his face with his hands, before slamming them down on the table. "There was no flame. There was no glow of light. In fact the room was dark, lit only by a few melted candles. The door to her room was open long before I arrived. All the doors in the dormitory were thrown open by Arch Maester Yun's spells. Furthermore, the heat was not coming from just her room. The entire complex of rooms was hot enough roast a boar, and the girl was out of her mind! She hadn't cast, or dispelled any enchantments recently. The Archmaester threw enough ice at her to bring on an early winter, and even once she was calmed down and moved to the lounge, it took an hour for her to return to her senses!"

    "Oh yes, and she had silver eyes. Silver? My, that is unusual. I have had the pleasure of speaking with the girl several times, and I'm fairly certain the objects behind her lids were always blue." Gutherie's tone was mocking, and as Jennin sputtered and began again to repeat his testimony, I realized what was driving Gutherie. He didn't understand Zia's power, and it frightened him. He felt powerless before it, and by using clever words and sarcasm to belittle others, he gained a tool to ward off the fear. I was usually the most diplomatic of Archmaesters, but the conference had gone on for far too long already.

    I stood up and raised my hands high, so the sleeves of my robe fell down and bared the shining gold bracelets that marked my position. I seldom displayed any of the trappings of power that came with the Archmaester position, but it was sometimes necessary to remind the other Maesters under whom they served. When I spoke, my volume drowned out all the muttering in the room.

    "Sir Gutherie! Your oratory skills are superb, far outstripping your magical abilities, or those of anyone on your end of the table. I realize that a student, especially such a young one, manifesting an unknown ability is shocking to all, but I assure you, Maester Jennin, myself, the two injured students, and all the melted metal fittings and scorched furnishings in the novices dormitory did not simply imagine the heat. Nor did the ceiling of the servant's quarters below."

    Gutherie and Richelieu, his chief sycophant, tried to interrupt, but I moved on quickly.

    "'The girl,' as you so brusquely refer to her, has been at this Academy for less than a year, and yet has routinely amazed your fellow Maesters with magical abilities far beyond those we black-robed geniuses can produce. If you've heard nothing of this, speak with some of your fellows. They can bring you up to speed -- I haven't the time. Since you so clearly disbelieve the evidence we have presented, I propose that you conduct a private interview with Zia, once she's feeling more herself. So long as there is another Maester present, you may quiz her on the strange heat with which she nearly killed us all. Perhaps she will gift you with the same demonstration she lavished upon those two novices."

    Gutherie blustered at that, but he could hardly object to such a logical solution. Not that I gave him a chance to.

    "With that resolved, let us move onto more important matters. What are we to do with Zia? She's been here for less than a year, but there are any number of reasons why it would be ludicrous to place her with the other first or second ranks."

    I paused there an instant, leaving a gap into which Maester Dominick neatly inserted himself. "Zia is stronger with electrical spells than the fifth levels I teach. I'd place her standard at or near Maester, in that field."

    This statement caused some considerable rumbling, and was openly scoffed at by Gutherie and a few of his cohorts. Their disbelief only grew louder when Maester Shien added her voice. "I can say the same for her talents over ice and water. Zia has attended a dozen of my middle and upper level ice classes, and I have taught her nothing. Her abilities come from within, from a deeper level of magery than that possessed by any Maester in this room."

    "Preposterous!"
    "It's true!"
    "Impossible!"
    "Madness!"

    These and a dozen other cries rang out at once, and I let them chatter for a moment, until their magpie squawking began to grow too heated. At that point I interrupted, standing and raising my arms and clanging the bracelets together. They emitted a unique pealing tone that all Maesters were sworn to respect. However grudgingly. I spoke quickly, before they could fall to squabbling again.

    "I propose a test. A ritual!" That got their attention. We Maesters had passed countless tests to obtain our ranks, and were therefore predisposed to inflict them upon others.

    "Zia must be advanced to a higher rank; that much is indisputable. And she must be tied most tightly to our Academy. Now, only her novice tattoo marks her as a student. If we are to continue revealing our most secret methods, she must swear fealty and obeisance, and make the appropriate vows. We do not normally ask so much of a novice, but Zia is no normal student. If she passes the required exams, if she can walk unbowed through the flame and ice, she will be placed into the fifth level, where her instruction will focus chiefly on control, discipline, and mental strength. Her magery is unquestioned; it's her focus and willpower that must be improved."

    My bold proposal set off another explosion of debate, but I knew I had them. While a novice was sometimes advanced straight to the second level, and exceptional students had sometimes skipped other, higher level ranks, advancing a novice to the fifth level was without precedent. Still, the Maesters were intrigued, for I had said that Zia must pass the tests, and it had ever been a policy at the Academy that none were denied advancement if they proved worthy.

    With that established, the argument soon turned to the nature of the ordeals Zia must endure, rather than the proposal that she be offered them at all. And with that, I knew I had won. I sat silently, trading a few knowing looks with Maester Shien, as the skeptics and doubters hashed out the terms of the exams. There was much to debate, for the normal fifth level requirements were inapplicable to Zia, containing as they did so much memorized material from books she had not yet been permitted to read. But she must be tested, and tested firmly, but fairly, for we Maesters prided ourselves on our fairness. Especially when we were most vainglorious.



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    Chapter Eight

    Zia's time came, just two weeks later. Her trial was to be a special one, held with an audience composed entirely of Maesters. The advancement rituals were usually held in the largest auditorium, for dozens of students in a given level, with an audience of Maesters and older students. (But not younger, for they were permitted no advance knowledge of the trials they were one day to undertake.) For Zia's we decided to exclude all students, since her ordeal was to be a unique one, devised solely for the occasion. She was not being presented with any of the usual puzzles and tests of book knowledge and memorization. Instead, the girl was tasked with demonstrating a suitably-high level of skill at shaping and controlling three of the chief forms of magery: fire, ice, and lightning. After each of the three, a majority vote of the Maesters present would determine if she had shown sufficient skill to advance.

    Though the testing method was original, the rest of the traditional elements were being preserved. Zia would still have to swear the standard oaths and bonds of loyalty, and she was to be marked with brands and tattoos, as all students of her level were. And of course, she would have to endure the ritual without the crutches any sort of armor or weapons. I wish I could report that several of the male Maesters had not spent the intervening period all but drooling over the prospect of seeing Zia unclothed. Their behavior was even worse on the day of the ritual, and before the girl had even appeared on the raised stage, any number of black robed dignitaries were seated in the front row, their brows beaded with drops of anticipatory perspiration.

    I'd done away with a special box or raised dais for the Archmaester years before, and I entered with the other professors and took a seat in the back row, near Maester Shien. She gave me a little smile, clearly sharing my anxiety about the day's event, and when I looked hard at the eager men in the front row, then looked away in disgust, Shien caught my eye and whispered under her breath, her tone wry.

    "Perhaps we should fetch them ales and urge them to clap and whistle, like sailors at a burlesque?" I chuckled, amazed as I so often was by Shien's ability to know just what I was thinking.

    Before I could reply, Zia emerged from the rear of the stage and walked to a marked square. There she stopped at the command of Maester Balstoy, an aged man who had officiated the student trials for more than half a century. Following Balstoy's instructions carefully, Zia bowed to the audience, stated her name, recited a sacred pledge, and so forth. I'd tried to streamline the ritual and ceremony of these trials since my first year as Arch Maester, but had so far made no headway. In this area, tradition still held most firm, with the nearly unanimous support of the other Maesters.

    Stifling a yawn, I tapped my fingers together. Despite my boredom I did not take my eyes off of Zia, and while I'd like to claim that was out of concern for her, it was more about the fact that she was going to drop her robes as soon as Balstoy told her to begin. The audience was nearly breathless, waiting for that magical moment, and as I sat amidst the trembling throng, I thought that perhaps this would give me the votes to update the rank ceremony. Enduring Balstoy's endless pronouncements was clearly trying the patience of the Maesters, when Zia's nudity waited just on the other side of them.

    Finally, after an interminable delay, Balstoy was satisfied and gestured for Zia to proceed. She did so at once, and without ceremony she let her robes slide down her arms and puddle to the floor. There she was, suddenly nude before our eyes, and for a moment I was conscious of nothing else. Unlike most of life's other great anticipations, the sight of Zia naked lived up to and surpassed my every expectation. She was flawless. Thinner and more muscular than I would have guessed, and the nipples that crowned her high, firm, perfect breasts were larger and darker than I would have believed. A realization I made even as I felt a burning shame at making it.

    When she strode to the first testing area, walking quickly on the balls of her feet, the tensing muscles in her legs elicited sighs of admiration. Sighs that changed to gasps when Zia reached the first station and immediately threw high her hands, causing a spinning ring of flame to appear a few yards above her fingertips. It hissed and crackled, the flames chasing themselves round and round like a headless dragon. Zia held it there for a moment, then lowered her arms, causing the wreath of fire to descend until it encircled her completely. If Zia felt the heat, which was intense enough that the front row of the audience was raising their hands to protect their faces, she gave no sign. Her expression was peaceful, her eyes half-lidded, and I thought I'd never seen her more beautiful.

    After a long moment she caused the flames to grow wider, stretching up and down to obscure her from ankles to temples, and just as the flame threatened to hide her entirely from our gaze, she leapt through them, landing neatly on the stone stage beyond the ring of fire. Behind her the conflagration raged for a moment, the ring compressing to a pillar, before it suddenly collapsed, puffs of the inferno licking across the floor until they splashed into the stone barrier between the audience and the stage.

    There was a moment of silence, before shouts and cheers, and even some applause rushed through the Maesters. No nays were voiced, and after a moment Maester Balstoy, the orator of the trial, struck his drum and spoke loudly.

    "The novice has demonstrated her skill with flame, and passed through a wall of fire, as ordained. She will now show her mastery over the element of lightning."

    Balstoy's deep voice echoed through the theater, cutting through the excited murmuring in the audience. United in awe, the Maesters watched as Zia strode quickly to the next station. It was fire all over again, with her arms raised the moment she was in place, and an amazing spell seconds later. This time she caused bolts of lightning to crackle down from the empty air above her, and somehow caught the arcs, holding them to her body. They crawled over her, sizzling and snapping like angry snakes as they writhed over her skin.

    The effect was as amazing as it was erotic, and I watched with my mouth hanging open as the crackling blue and white light illuminated every inch of Zia's nude flesh. Captivated as I was by her exposed beauty, I also felt amazed at her magery. I'd seen wizards call down lightning bolts, and sometimes draw the crackling energy into their hands before launching an attack, but how was Zia maintaining the charges, and enduring their power as they ran over and through her body? How did her skin not blacken beneath their blistering heat?

    There was no time to ask, and it was all I could do to clap along with the rest when Zia finally dispelled the lightning, sending the energy skittering along the floor like a simple spell of Charged Bolts. She hardly waited for Maester Balstoy to intone her success before she strode to the final station, having spent less time on stage than many students did just dropping their robes and preparing to cast their first spell.

    Zia's third trial was ice, and while I waited for her to amaze us again, I reflected on the way these tests had been selected. There were many types of magery beyond fire, ice, and lightning. Teleportation for one, and while Zia had improved greatly, she was still little better than a novice at that skill. Her ability to wield the Arcane magics was also fairly rudimentary, and when none of the Maesters had suggested testing her in those areas during the long meetings leading up to this trial, I had breathed a sigh of relief.

    Instead my fellows had selected fire, ice, and lightning for her test, and I'd known she would pass long before this day. She was even better with these elements than I'd expected, and as I watched her summon a black cloud, then stand beneath it as heavy flakes of snow began to blanket the stage, I could only smile. Snow poured down over the naked girl, forming drifts that heaped almost to her waist. A minute later she was neck deep, and as soon as the falling snow covered her head, Zia's enchantment refashioned itself.

    The falling snow ceased, and was replaced by ice. Just pebbles of it at first, like hail, but soon the falling chunks were as long as a finger, than a hand, and then a forearm. Like the heads of spears, they plunged down, skewering through the puffy snow beneath which Zia had vanished. Some missed their target and crashed to the stones, and the musical chiming of breaking ice filled the room as shards bounced in every direction.

    This bizarre bombardment continued for another half minute until the cloud was abruptly dispersed, the fall of ice ceased, and with a loud crack, Zia reappeared atop the pile of ice and show she'd constructed. Her arms were raised, her face was alight with triumph, and I am not ashamed to say I was one of the first to rise to my feet, applauding her demonstration. Even the skeptics, Gutherie and his contingent, had to join in. We'd all witnessed far less impressive displays earn men and women the status of Maester, and the idea that a mage of this much power, a girl who would hardly have been a first rank under any normal circumstances, was now a Fifth, amazed us all.

    Zia's ordeal was not yet over though, and she knew it. She did not bask in the applause, and instead slid down the heap of ice and marched to an ancient stone chair that stood at one end of the elevated stage. As she walked Balstoy cried out her successful completion of the trial, and he was still speaking when Zia perched in the chair and submitted herself to two other Maesters and their ceremonial tools. They began the tattooing at once, permanently marking Zia, as we all had been, with scrollwork designs that denoted the Academy to which we belonged and the rank which we had achieved.

    After the tattoos came the brands, which most students rightly dreaded. Zia was receiving two today, a prospect that caused me sympathetic pain. Only one was usually applied per ritual, but since Zia was leaping so far ahead Balstoy had decreed that she must take two in succession. She'd have to take two again, on her next advancement, just to catch up to the four brands that most sixth level students bore. Not that there was any guarantee that Zia would only advance one rank next time. My fellows would never let her leap right to Maester, not so soon, but she would surely deserved to be a Seventh or Eighth, if she continued to progress with even a fraction of the blurring speed she'd shown so far.

    If Zia dreaded the brands, she gave no sign, and never once turned her head to gaze upon the two irons, glowing red in the flames of a brazier that stood not far from her chair.

    As for her tattoos, the room was too dark and Zia too far away for me to make out anything of their design. No two tattoos were ever the same, for the Maesters who performed them claimed always that the Gods moved through them, creating original designs that were most in tune with each student that passed beneath their hands. One man was hard at work crafting a design across the outside of Zia's left knee, while the other was inking the top of her right shoulder. They worked with magical speed, the needles on their tools flickering up and down, enchanted ink, fortified with various rare elements, flowing and mixing with occasional trickles of shed blood.

    During the inking their lips never stopped moving as they chanted a sacred litany. Zia matched them, repeating words as directed, but never looking down to mark their progress. I suspected she was lost to a euphoria at having passed the exam; I could hardly remember the application of any of my tattoos, so relieved had I been every time. The brands though... those I remembered, and almost unconsciously I ran my fingers over the one atop my right shoulder. I wore others on my forearms, my right shin, my left hip, and the worst of them, a curving serpent on my right buttock. I'd been unable to sit for weeks after receiving that one, a mark of achievement I received after advancing to the eighth rank, the final stage below Maester.

    The location of the brands varied as much as did the tattoos; again it was said that the Gods determined the placement, and that the Maester wielding the iron was just a vessel through which flowed divine inspiration. That's what we told the students, anyway. I never thought they believed it. I know I hadn't, and during those weeks of eating standing up and sleeping on my stomach I'd often wondered what I had done to offend Maester Balstoy.

    Yes, he was that old, ancient enough to have been the officiant during my time as a student. I'd never witnessed it, but there were rumors of certain wicked students receiving brands on their faces, or even directly on their genitalia. Shien bore one on her lower back, and had once confessed to me that during the ritual, when Balstoy had commanded her to turn around and bend over, she had nearly refused, suddenly certain he was going to use the glowing metal to sear shut her womanly orifice.

    I hoped Zia would not fare so poorly, and crossed my fingers when the tattoos were finally finished and Maester Balstoy made an official announcement. All that remained was the branding and the final oaths, and when Balstoy raised high the first iron, the double cross design glowing red hot, then beckoned Zia to stand and turn around, I joined the audience in a collective intake of breath.

    Balstoy took a few seconds to savor the moment, before lowering the iron to Zia's left shoulder blade and holding it there for a count of three. That was longer than the mark was usually applied, but Zia did not cry out or shrink away, even as a stink like scorched pork rose up from her scalded flesh. For the second brand, the sign of the twisted snake, the Maester pushed her back into the chair, then seized her left foot, tossing it up and over the arm rest. Zia was now exposed before him, though thanks to the angle and the high armrests, no one in the audience could see clearly the treasure that the old Maester was nearly face to face with.

    Zia must have been terrified, her position worse than Shien's had been so many years ago, but she did not move a muscle, even as Balstoy moved the heated metal upwards, holding it near enough to Zia's inner thigh to singe hairs. As the glowing iron moved ever higher, I found myself standing, a cry at my lips. Shien was standing beside me, her face knotted, her hands pressed protectively to her belly, but before either of us could take action, Balstoy swung to the side and pressed the glowing metal into Zia's right inner thigh, midway between her knee and groin. She did not cry out, though I saw her fists clench the leather straps on the chair's arms, her grip trembling.

    At last, after three seconds that seemed endless, Maester Balstoy stood back, took one last look at his handiwork, then hung the iron back on the hook beside the brazier. Zia remained motionless, her leg still up on the armrest, and at that point I realized how cruel a brand that had been. She would feel it with every step she took for weeks, as she would literally be unable to hold her thighs together without pain. Balstoy had meant some sort of lesson, that much was clear. Did he believe the rumors and think Zia a whore, one who deserved to be branded in a location that could not be overlooked every time she welcomed a man? Or was he making an ironic statement, by making it literally impossible for Zia to keep her thighs together, at least until the brand healed?

    Stepping close to the chair, Maester Balstoy took her by the arm, forcing Zia to her feet. With her standing beside him, he recited the final oaths, waited for Zia to repeat them, and then announced that the student had successfully completed the ritual. And with that, Zia was officially promoted to the fifth level, an impressive rank that had never before been held by anyone so young.

    And assuredly never will again, given how disastrous were Zia's few remaining months in the Academy.

    Chapter Nine

    For the first two or three months of Zia's second year, I thought things were going well. A common delusion of mine, I've realized in the months since.

    Zia had suffered some teasing and cruel rumors from the other students, and of course the complaints about her receiving special treatment were only increased by her leaping straight from novice to Fifth, but aside from word about her brand getting out, and some nasty comments about her now having another excuse to spread her legs, the overall treatment was more jealous and resigned than spiteful. I tried to keep a close eye on Zia, and when she remained friendly and cheerful my worries subsided. The girl was utterly possessed by her studies, and seemed to enjoy a healthy relationship with a number of the other Maesters as well. Even the skeptical Maester Gutherie seemed to have come around.

    There was one potential problem. By a quirk of fate, the current fifth rank class was almost entirely male. There was just one other female, since four women and one man had advanced to the sixth rank a few months earlier, when their trials were held. Zia thus became just the second female Fifth, and was housed in a private room with her only fellow, Kara. It was a strange balance for the class, with Zia, Kara, and sixteen men, all of whom were at least seven or eight years older than Zia. It wasn't forever; there were a number of promising female Fourths, and half a dozen of the male Fifths would surely advance come next year's trial.

    In retrospect though, like so many other things Zia faced at the Academy, that sort of gender differential seemed a clear recipe for trouble. Once again, I failed to discern it at the time, and even thought it might be a good thing. After all, Zia had had the most trouble with other females, and now she would only be around one woman on a regular basis. Furthermore, Kara was thirty-one, plain, and destined for a life of scholarship and study. I hoped that she could act as a mentor and a role-model for Zia, in behavior if not magery, since her modest and hard-won talents could not hold a candle to Zia's raw power, and their career paths could not have been more different.

    It wasn't until much later, after Zia's apocalyptic departure, that I learned how much Kara had enjoyed her private room, and how deeply she resented having a roommate forced upon her. Especially one who had all the beauty, grace, and male attention she'd never enjoyed herself. Even Zia's friendliness worked against her, as she tried to treat all of the fifth rank men equally, a tactic that nurtured a delusional infatuation in the lot of them. Worst of all was the fact that Zia was so young and inexperienced. She'd been on an equal footing with the other novices and first levels, since few of them were past their early twenties. Living in a small dormitory with more than a dozen men, all of them a decade older, many of them determined to win her affections, was quite a different experience.

    But who could Zia confide in? Kara hardly spoke to her, and she was not very close to any of the female Maesters. I'd often hoped that Zia would take to Shien, but though they were cordial to each other, there always seemed to be some obstacle to their forming a real friendship. She got along with many of the male Maesters, me best of all, but I was the Archmaester, and I can only suppose that the formality of the student/teacher relationship kept Zia from unburdening herself to me. We spoke regularly, before and after our private sessions, but the problems she asked me about were always related to magery.

    Still, for all the emotional turmoil she was living through, Zia's magery continued to progress by leaps and bounds. She could cast any spell, once she learned the incantation, and with practice she quickly refined her ability to summon elemental forces. She even mastered teleportation, though the related skill of changing her appearance continued to prove vexing. Zia could alter her features, but she always remained beautiful and radiant. I told her once I would know her with any face, just by her smile, and she laughed and said perhaps she could make herself a face with no mouth.

    By the fifth month of her second year, I began to wonder what else the Academy had left to teach her. Zia did not know everything, but she could learn anything with remarkable speed, and at the urging of some of the Maesters she'd begun researching ancient, forgotten lore. Many spells and techniques that had once been known were now lost, forgotten over the centuries, and it was thought that perhaps Zia, with her uncanny knack for cutting straight to the elemental heart of so many spells, might unlock some of the secrets.

    In this way we were already treating the girl as half a Maester, and while I know she enjoyed the responsibility, the work it added to her already overburdened schedule surely contributed to the final break. Twice during her last month at the Academy she fell asleep in my study while waiting for me to finish other work and begin our teleportation lessons. Each time I took a moment to gaze upon her face, her visage perfectly peaceful in repose, before waking her. I worried about her, dozing off like that, but I felt flattered that she trusted me enough to sleep in my office, her legs curled beneath her as gracefully as a cat. When she woke she was always alert and full of excuses and apologies for her napping. Which I, fool that I was, accepted at face value.

    Chapter Ten

    Overworked, overstressed, constantly singled out for harassment, resented by the roommate who should have been her one true friend, pressed with unwanted affections by her fellow Fifths, and pressed into demanding Maester-level work long before her twentieth birthday, a collapse, or explosion, was inevitable. No one saw it coming, certainly not Zia, and no one could have dreamt how calamitous the event would be.

    I fell out of bed on that fateful night, literally shaken from my dreams by a blast so powerful the chandelier was swinging overhead when I stumbled to my feet. I was awake at once, and when a second blast rocked the Academy, knocking books from my shelves, I assumed the school was under attack. By demons, or perhaps a rival clan; it mattered not. I had not been in the field for years, but old instincts awakened at once, and with the aid of some telekinesis I was dressed, armored, and armed in just seconds.

    Charging out into the corridor, I found milling Maesters galore, most of them still in their night clothes. Only Shien, bless her, had emerged from her room ready to fight, and she was a scholar, not a battle mage. This was no time for shouting and confusion, so I created a thundering blast of my own, sending blue flames rushing along the ceiling of the corridor to be sure I had everyone's attention.

    "The Academy is under attack! Arm yourselves and prepare to defend all that you hold dear!" When a third explosion swayed the hallway and sent a statue crashing to the floor, the Maesters moved with a purpose, flying back into their rooms, from which came the snapping sounds of telekinesis and other spells. I ran for the stairs, Shien beside me, her wand at the ready, a glowing orb in her off hand. We did not pause for the steps, but teleported straight down four levels to the main lobby, appearing amidst staggering, coughing, dust-covered students.

    "What's happening?" cried Shien. A babble of voices provided a dozen useless answers, but the hands pointing down the long hallway to the east gave a clear answer. Shien and I were off at once, shouting that all the students were to assemble in the Great Hall.

    A fourth explosion came seconds later, this one throwing Maester Shien sideways into me. I caught her, noticing on some distant level what a pleasant handful she was, but focusing my attention on the danger we were racing towards. We soon found it, when we rounded a corner into the wing that housed the student dormitories, and were halted by the appalling sight before us. Corpses were strewn across the floor, the bodies mangled unrecognizably. Arms and legs were twisted and torn, blood was splashed along the walls, and as I gazed in astonished horror, Shien made the deduction.

    "These are fifth level students. Their dormitory is behind that wall." The wall to which Shien referred was now a heap of bricks from which dust was still billowing.

    "Zia." I said, my voice full of worry for her safety. Shien heard me, but leapt to a different conclusion. "She has the power to destroy like this. I fear she was finally pushed her too far."

    I had not given a thought to that possibility, but once Shien voiced it, I could think of nothing but. Zia, that wonderful, beautiful, delightful girl -- on a murderous rampage? Against her fellow students? It seemed unimaginable, but as Shien and I picked our way through the rubble and our count of victims reached ten, it seemed the only possible solution.

    There was one survivor in the dormitory. Kara. She was unconscious and badly injured, her head and shoulders bruised and cut where a brick wall had fallen on her. I took hold of the girl, looked through the window, and teleported us both across the courtyard to a distant balcony. This took me out of the palace that the Academy occupied and into a neighboring noble's estate. Two guardsmen, summoned by the noise and commotion across the way, saw me appear, the bleeding girl in my arms. I entrusted Kara to them, asking them to wake the manor and summon their physician, then teleported down to the courtyard and around the long walkway to the front gate of my Academy. The doors were open, smashed open from within as if by a great battering ram, and as I inspected the damage Shien appeared, four other Maesters teleporting in on her heels.

    "I can find no trace of her within the dormitory, or elsewhere in the school." said Shien, confirming my worst fears. I took a moment to gather my thoughts, then spoke. My audience had by then grown to more than a dozen, as three more Maesters and several eighth level students joined us in the shattered ruins of the Academy's main lobby.

    "This is Zia's doing. She has slaughtered the entire class of Fifths, save for Kara." I heard gasps, and one of the Eights dropped his wand in shock. "You'll want not to drop that again this evening, Marcos." I said, trying to put some humor into my tone. With a bang of telekinesis the wand was at once back in his hand, and Marcos nodded to me, his face grim.

    "We must find Zia. Find her and bring her back. We know nothing of her condition; she might have lost her mind, or been injured in the rampage. Bring her back alive! If you find her, send up a jet of flame. Two dozen of your fellows will be there within half a minute. I want answers. Too many have died tonight; we must know what caused this chaos."

    I paused a moment, their faces still trained on mine. It hurt, but it had to be said.

    "Value yourself. Guard your life. If you must fight, fight to win. Zia's raw power is unmatched, but she knows nothing of the subtleties of dueling. Attempt to disarm her, knock her out with an unseen stone from behind. If you have no other choice, kill her. Kill her before dying yourself."

    With that I nodded, and sent them forth. They scattered all through the city, and searched long, for Gea Kul is a sprawling city, and the docks that stretch out into the harbor add much more territory to the city. I did not join them; my responsibility was to the Academy, and though I briefed and sent out dozens more searchers, I spent most of the night cleaning up the mess and counting the bodies. More were found in the rubble, but two of the male fifth levels had survived, thanks to their truancy. Both had been out of the dormitory, in empty classrooms in the company of young ladies. One lass was a fourth level student, the other a scullery maid, and I went easy on the punishments for all of them. It wasn't every day that breaking curfew saved your life.

    None of the searchers found Zia. There were signs of her; several guardsmen dead outside one tavern, their bodies baked to a substance resembling charcoal. Two pick pockets were found dead half a mile to the northwest, their bodies driven into the walls of an alley so hard they appeared flattened. Zia left no other bodies, but two guards near the docks were sure they'd seen a woman matching her description pass by them that evening, just minutes after the huge explosions had shaken the entire city and sent most dockworkers moving curiously inland.

    I sent searchers out along the Southern and Northern Roads, and others to canvas the docks, but none found Zia, and all returned alive. She might have left the city by either road, or gone overland to the East, but it was widely assumed she'd taken passage on a ship heading across the Inner Seas. None of the sailors would tell us anything, but that was no surprise, for they distrusted mages. They distrusted women as well, and many felt the fairer sex brought ill fortune on a ship at sea, but I could not imagine any sailor turning down Zia as she pled for safe passage aboard a departing vessel.

    It was hard to believe, but after a week of investigation, I could reach no other conclusion. Zia had gone berserk, murdered fourteen of her fellow students, five more men in the streets, and vanished from the city in one night. Vanished without a trace.

    Chapter Eleven

    The one survivor, Kara, regained consciousness two days after the events, and her testimony answered many questions. Nothing the girl told me was surprising, and that was the worst part. Listening to her, I first felt the terrible sinking sensation that still fills the pit of my stomach, nearly half a year later. As Kara spoke, her words weak, her head heavily bandaged, I saw clearly how I'd failed the Academy, failed Zia, and for the first time, realized that all of this could have been avoided.

    Kara was not a chatty woman, and her tale was told quickly. Zia had looked exhausted for weeks, and had been sleeping poorly. Nightly, Kara said, she woke to the sound of sobs coming from Zia's bed. Yet every morning when Kara woke, Zia was already up, pouring over dusty manuscripts by candlelight, or holding old books or vellum scrolls up to the window, straining her eyes to make out the faded symbols in the morning light.

    On that fateful night, Zia had come in late, and when she saw that Kara had papers spread all across the floor of their room, she'd backed out and collapsed in the armchair in the common room of their dormitory. When telling her tale, Kara expressed few emotions, but the guilt she felt over this was plain to see. She knew that if she hadn't been collating her notes, and hadn't taken the whole floor of their room to spread them across, Zia would have fallen asleep in her own bed and none of this would have happened. I could say little to comfort her, for she was correct, though I thought Zia would still have erupted at some point, as much stress as she was under.

    That night, her last in the Academy, Zia had done as I'd seen in my own office; she'd dozed off as soon as she was sitting down, utterly drained by her demanding schedule. Unlike the naps she'd snatched in my office, this one was not undisturbed. This one was in the public room in the fifth rank dormitory, and as Kara told it, by the time the whispering voices and giggling of the male students finally drew her attention, she saw six of eight of the men crowded around Zia's chair. They were gazing down upon her, but with less reserve than I'd shown in similar situations, and Kara said several of them were daring to stroke her hair, or leaning down to gaze at her face from just inches away.

    "Go ahead then, Rogers. You claim to have touched them with her permission. Take a squeeze now!"

    So Kara reported hearing, and she blushed as she said it. Blushed for the words, and for her inaction. Maester Shien, sitting beside me while I took Kara's report, cut through the nonsense as efficiently as ever. "You thought Zia was a tease and a slut, and that she deserved it."

    Kara cast her eyes down, only able to nod. She did not shed a tear though, and quickly resumed the story. A few minutes passed, as the boys dared each other and grew louder and bolder while the exhausted girl slept on. Kara said that she was just about to intervene, that it had gone on long enough, when Zia finally woke. I doubted that; I didn't think Kara would have intervened to stop anything short of rape, but I let her tell the story without interruption.

    "Zia leapt up, or tried to. Rogers and another man, Pallow I think, were kneeling in front of her, and they'd worked her robe up far enough to show the brand on her thigh. One of them was kissing it. I think. Zia tried to kick them, tried to get up, but she was so tiny that she couldn't even push them away. Other guys were behind her, and one of them squeezed her breast, laughing."

    "'Don't touch me!' she shouted. Her voice was high and cracked, and I realized she was panicking. She'd probably been dreaming, and to wake up with all those guys on top of her..." Kara trailed off, then resumed a moment later.

    "I felt the heat first. And then there was a smell, and a splatting sound, like a dropped tomato. It looked like that too, a splash of red across the room. Like someone had thrown a bucket of paint. One of the guys shouted something, not even a word, and I heard someone vomiting. He hacked when he did it, like a dog.

    "Zia screamed again, 'Get away from me!' she said, and I felt a flash of heat, and heard more dropped tomato sounds. She blew them up. With her hands; she touched them and they burst from within. I think she put some kind of fire inside of them, and it cooked them from the inside, splitting them open like a pig over a fire, if you don't gut it and slice it open."

    I tried to imagine what sort of magery that was, but could not. Leave it to Zia to use something new and unique, even in her moment of greatest distress.

    Kara continued her tale, her voice as flat and without inflection has it had been throughout. "The other guys came running out of their rooms at the noise, and Zia cut them down as soon as she saw them. She used fire, mostly, hurling them back into their rooms. That's when the explosions started; she cast something that blew up their rooms. The doors slammed shut, then a second later something detonated inside each room and the doors were blasted open. Furniture, books and clothing came flying out each time, along with the broken bodies. I was screaming by that time, screaming and kneeling in the doorway. I never even thought about finding my wand, or trying to stop Zia. Trying to cast a spell on her. What could I have done? Nothing I know how to cast would have hurt her."

    I let Shien finish the interview, sitting back in the chair and looking off into space. Zia had not attacked Kara, or she'd have been dead too. Her injury had come from falling debris, when one of the blasts had knocked down a wall. Kara's last memory was of being knocked back into her room, across her scattered notes, while bricks rained down from above. But she'd lived; lived to tell the tale. The only other survivor was Zia, and she was gone, vanished to any of a hundred sea ports on the Inner Seas.

    She'd left nothing of herself behind, and besides the lives of those men, she'd destroyed my school, my guild, my Academy. All were ruined.... as was I.

    Chapter Twelve

    It didn't end there, of course. The Academy's reputation had been tarnished, students had died, and the General in charge of Gea Kul was furious that three of his men had been incinerated during Zia's escape from the city. It had been a century since the King Valashan had granted our clan one of his smaller palaces for our training Academy. The gift had been made in perpetuity, in gratitude for supporting him in a war, but maintaining the autonomy the Academy had been granted was a matter of constant political maneuvering. The events with Zia put us into a terrible position, and only by calling in favors and issuing various bribes did I keep the General from stationing soldiers within the school, and the Prince from doubling or tripling our taxes.

    Once that situation was stabilized, I called a full meeting of the Maesters and used it to resign my position as Archmaester. Though I had some supporters, my offer was accepted, and the vote was not close. There was a general sentiment that someone had to be blamed, and who better than me? I'd been Zia's close friend and advisor. I'd formulated the educational program that had so backfired. I'd pushed her into the fifth level with all of those male students. All those dead students.

    I didn't mind. I agreed with them. It was my fault. I'd failed the Academy, I'd failed the Maesters, I'd failed the students, and I'd failed Zia. I offered to go into exile, to go off into the field and fight 'til the death for the glory of our clan, to vanish into research and never again show my face. Whatever the assembly wished. My acceptance, my passivity, drove away my few remaining defenders. Even loyal Shien looked at me with disgust, as I knelt before the company, ready to accept any punishment my enemies could devise.

    Perhaps the offer was too tempting, and when no consensus could be reached, I was commanded to remain in the school, given some beginner courses to teach, and told to wait for such punishment as would best fit my crimes. I agreed. Better men than I could lead the school, and decide what to do about Zia. I simply wanted to withdraw; to never need make a crucial decision again. I'd had my chance, and I'd failed the greatest test I was likely ever to face.

    At times, during the dark weeks that followed, I wished that Zia had met me on her rampage out of the Academy. She would have turned me inside out, boiled my organs within my body, and that would have been a suitable end for me. I'd failed her, after all. It was my fault she'd had to flee into the night.


    Several months passed, while the Academy gradually returned to normal. A new Archmaester was chosen, and Maester Gutherie now ruled the assembly. Literally ruled, from what I heard. I did not attend any of the conclaves, keeping to my new, much-reduced quarters on the lower level, but I heard my fellow Maesters grumbling about Gutherie's ego and his cronyism. He'd made conflicting promises to secure a majority of the vote, then turned on all of his new supporters the moment he was Archmaester. His friends were living in the best quarters and dining on the finest fare, while those who had vied with him for the leadership were suffering with poor teaching assignments, small quarters, and few privileges. It was no way to run a fraternity based on egalitarianism, and Gutherie was sure to be voted out when his term ran out, but he had five years to enrich himself and punish his enemies, and he seemed likely to use every moment of it for just that.

    Surprisingly, he did not single me out for any further unpleasantness. I had expected him too, but the man had always been a keen judge of character, and he likely realized that I wanted to be punished. That I would have welcomed it. That my greatest enemy was free time to contemplate my failings. So he ignored me entirely, save for cutting back on my teaching schedule and assigning me to boring menial tasks such as the lonely night watch on the outer walls. Where I had nothing but time, to think over my failings.


    Events might have continued that way indefinitely, had not some surprising news reached the Academy in early Fall, four months after Zia's dramatic disappearance. Demons were invading the mortal realm, pouring out of crimson Hellgates that were popping up all over the northern half of the Western Continent. They were far from our city, but every mage clan was sending battle mages off to prove their mettle in combat. Other humans were resisting as well, including large numbers of Barbarians. The Hellgates were far to the east of the wild lands they called home, but the Barbarians felt a bond to all the Northern lands that others called the Dreadlands, and they would defend them from all invaders. Especially demons, for their kind felt that Baal's forces had been responsible for the destruction of their sacred Mount Arreat some two decades before.

    Like all mages, my clan felt an instinctive dislike for Barbarians. They were savages, prone to uncontrolled violence, and their great strength and natural resistance to the elements made them dangerous to face in combat. This made it all the more remarkable that the reports all agreed that an unknown female mage was working with the Barbarians and leading the defense against the demons. Her power was said to be matched only by her bravery, and all who met her came away enchanted by her remarkable beauty and strength of will. One report even mentioned the double-cross scar on her shoulder blade. Archmaester Gutherie reportedly put the most stock in that one, but I thought it nonsense. Surely some sailor had come with the tale of this witch, and when asked if she bore a certain scar on her shoulder, he'd been quick to confirm it. For an extra silver or two.

    Still, brand or not, there was no doubt that we'd found Zia. Fled to the North, allied with Barbarians, and according to Archmaester Gutherie, flaunting the secrets of our clan where all could see them. Something had to be done; the humiliation to our Academy was absolute, and a death squad was authorized. I did not witness that vote, for I attended none of the gatherings unless directly compelled by an order from Gutherie or one of his minions.

    Just such an order came down to me the next morning, and after finishing the class and bidding the Firsts good day, I marched up the long flights of stairs to the new Archmaester quarters. Gutherie had claimed the top two floors of the palace and had them renovated to a palatial state. He kept me waiting an hour, giving me time to appreciate his taste in comfortable furniture, before Maester Richelieu, Gutherie's second, ushered me into the Archmaester's presence.

    I expected threats and insults. Instead I received orders. Gutherie must have sensed that nothing he could say would touch my soul. Nothing but the mission he charged me with. To lead the death squad, to take four of my fellows over the sea and into the Dreadlands. We were to seek out Zia, and kill her. Gutherie did not put it so bluntly, of course, but the meaning was the same. I was to find her and to mutilate her body, tearing off the brands and tattoos, which I was to return to the Academy, where they would be tanned, dried, and displayed as a warning to others.

    I accepted the mission without complaint, asking only to be allowed to choose my four fellows. Gutherie denied this, telling me they'd already been selected. Richelieu handed me a list of their names, and I was not surprised to see that all were enemies of the new Archmaester. Happily, all were experienced battle mages. I'd been afraid that Gutherie would load me down with scholars, but even he was not such a fool. He knew Zia's powers, and he wanted her dead. This was not a hopeless mission, one intended solely to remove some of his enemies.

    It would almost certainly do that, of course. Even if we five could survive the perilous warzone and track Zia down, she would not offer us her throat. Five Maesters should be strong enough to defeat her, but could we kill, or escape, her Barbarian comrades? I thought not, and I knew Gutherie would have agreed with my assessment. He hoped we would kill Zia, restoring the honor of the Academy, before we were killed by the Barbarians, the demons, or both.

    Grim though our prospects seemed, I did not object or complain, and asked only when Gutherie wished us to depart. "On the morning tide," said Richelieu, his tone that of a man who had waited long to utter that phrase. I simply looked at him, and enough of my old fire must have remained that he quailed and fell away.

    "By your leave." I muttered as I turned to go, not pausing to wait for, or acknowledge, any parting orders from the Archmaester. Eager though I was to leave his presence and his quarters, my thoughts turned suddenly to Maester Shien, the list of my four doomed fellows held in one hand. I'd not spoken to Shien in months, not since shortly after I'd resigned my position. As best I could remember, she'd tried to cheer me up, or talk some sense into me, but I'd had no interest in cheer or sense, and after cajoling, then raging at me, Shien had stormed out, disgusted by my disinterest.

    I should speak with her, I thought. I should speak with her before I depart on this mission.

    I did not, my cowardice and self loathing enough to send me creeping past the classroom I knew she was teaching in, at that hour. Two of the mages I sought were teaching nearby, but after a few words with me they both dismissed their classes and headed straight to their quarters to pack. I found the other two down in the library, and they were as quick to drop what they were doing. I made ready with similar haste, and we five walked away from the main gates just before the supper hour, heading straight for the docks where we were to secure passage on the first ship sailing north or west.

    Just as we left the grounds, I heard a familiar female voice. "Yun!" she cried out, anguish in her tone, but though I knew it was Shien, I did not slow, nor turn. I'd put all my heart into trying to help Zia, and what had that gotten me? My heart had grown too cold during my months of solitude to thaw now. Better that I parted silently from Shien, with nothing to remind us of our younger days.


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    Chapter Thirteen


    The voyage north was uneventful, as was our hike west, through the outskirts of the Dreadlands. There was no trade in this area, and no good roads. The inhabitants were fishermen on the coast, and nomadic trackers and hunters inland. The only permanent dwellings were small farms, each staffed by a few desperate souls struggling to scratch a living out of the short summers, freezing winters, and rocky soil. The forces of the Burning Hells could hardly have chosen a less-appealing area of Sanctuary to invade, but here they had come, as we were reminded by every person we met, most of them refugees fleeing south, towards the inner sea we had so recently sailed across.

    It was three days before we saw our first demons, and they were a spindly, mangy pack of Fallen. Two of my fellows wiped them out with a casual flurry of ice spells, and we were examining their shattered corpses when two men raced over the hill and into our midst. They were not Barbarians, but were clearly warriors of some sort, and well protected in their gleaming plate mail.

    "Well met, noble Mages! If you've come for battle, you'll find plenty to the north. A vast Hellgate split open the side of that low mountain two days past, and the demons are still pouring forth. The girl witch and her Crushers lead the attack, as always. We aid their cause by hunting down strays."

    Maester Corwyn offered the knights some of our supplies, which they declined with a laugh, before turning and racing back over the rolling hills, their footspeed far greater than any normal man could have managed.

    "Those two were Paladins," said Maester Darwin, the oldest of our company. "Their order was nearly destroyed by Mephisto's corruption of Sankekur and his high council. It is good to see that some live on, and hold to the old ways."

    No one in the company felt the need to point out the obvious undertone of the Paladins' words. That Zia had grown famous in this land, and was surely the "girl witch." The "Crushers" must be her Barbarian allies, and the fact that they were hardened, experienced warriors was definitely a complication. No one spoke of this; we simply hoisted our packs and set off to the north.

    We slept uneasily that night, leaving two men awake and on guard at all times. Our greatest concern was a tide of ravening demons, but the possibility of Zia and her savages walking into our camp was not so remote that we could sleep unguarded. Our advantage, as I saw it, was that she could not be expecting us. After so long without any pursuit she must think herself forgiven, or at least forgotten. Her worries were the demonic creatures which poured straight from the Burning Hells, against which a few desperate human defenders seemed no more than straws before a gale.

    Our plans, to murder her and slaughter her defenders, were almost treasonous. No one in this land would forgive us for putting a private clan matter above the larger battle against the demonic hordes. But we were here on orders from our Archmaester, and this was a matter of pride and justice. By previous agreement, we would speak to no one about our mission. We hoped to speak to no one at all.


    Chapter Fourteen

    The fourth and fifth days were much more hazardous. We encountered several larger parties of demons, as well as one greater demon who had killed a lone mage. The dead human was a man, and a sorcerer; our hunt for Zia was not ended so suddenly as that. When we came upon the monstrous creature it was nearly dead from wounds dealt by the sorcerer, and was unable to flee or fight. Though injured, it was defiant, and it sat in the ruins of the sorcerer's camp, toying with his severed head. We obliterated the demon, sending five arcs of lightning into its chest at once, and left the dead sorcerer beside the smoking remains of his killer. There was no time for a burial, in this savage land.

    Other battles during those days were not so easy, and Maester Corwyn lost two fingers on his left hand to the snapping jaws of some sort of armored attack beast. I cauterized the stumps and bandaged him as best I could, and we fought on. By sundown we were exhausted, ensanguined, and glad to make camp near a small contingent of foot soldiers and the pair of female archers who led them. They were amazing warriors, their skill such that they could send forth arrows with perfect accuracy, arrows that exploded upon impact, sending out waves of fire or shocking blasts of lightning that ravaged the demonic hordes.

    That fifth night is this night, and as I finish my reminiscences the fire has burned low, and three of my fellows are asleep. One stands watch with the foot soldiers; I know not which of the four, for the sleeping three are bundled tightly within their robes, and I did not see the fourth go. I must sleep, for it will soon be my turn to stand watch, but I can not close my eyes. All my thoughts are of Zia. I am curious what she looks like and how she has grown in her time alone, but mostly I think of her as she was -- an innocent, curious, friendly, engaging child.

    She entered my school with the brightest future imaginable, and left in darkness, streaked with the blood of her fellow students. That failure is my greatest sin, and one I fear I may not live to make amends for.


    Chapter Fifteen


    We rose early on our sixth day in the Dreadlands, a pre-dawn demonic assault pulling us all from our slumber. We triumphed, and after a few sorrowful words spoken over the mangled corpse of a foot soldier, killed by a blow delivered by a demon the size of a hay wain, we moved on. Every group we'd met since the third day had known of Zia, though none knew her name. She was "The Girl Witch" to all, and it was clear that she was universally admired. The power of her magics were said to be beyond belief, and many had witnessed her fearlessness as she hurled spells straight down the throats of greater demons, teleporting out of reach just inches before their rending claws tore her in half. Less was said of the Barbarians who fought with her, but they were always mentioned as well, as fierce warriors and loyal defenders, ever guarding the back of their mistress and maintaining a camp sufficient to allow them comfortable rest after their day's labors.

    We Maesters talked amongst ourselves, as we walked, and agreed to use a wide array of ice attacks if and when we met Zia's Crushers. The object was not to kill the Barbarians, but to slow them enough that we might dispatch their Zia before they could interfere. Chilling blasts, coupled with an ice-slicked ground, should work well enough for that. Just how we were to kill Zia remained largely undiscussed, but we all knew one or two especially lethal spells. As with most mage clans, our magics were better suited for attack than defense. We knew Zia could kill us all; we had few defenses against her spells, but we hoped that she could not stop ours either.

    My private hope was that she would strike me down first, my death giving my fellow Maesters time to take her down. I deserved death, and at least that way my life might buy survival for my fellow mages and success for our mission.


    Noon came without sight of Zia or any larger battles, and we stopped in the hollow of a hill to share out our rations. The dried meat, stale bread, and hard cheese was far from delicious, but it was sustaining, and I was gnawing my way through the last of a hunk of salted beef when the earth shook with a mighty explosion. I was on my feet at once, and had teleported to the top of the hill before I could think. There, less than a mile distant, came a vast wave of demons. Hundreds. Thousands? They were without number, the horde sufficient to blacken the earth. Dancing before them, fighting and retreating at the same time, was Zia.

    My heart stopped in my chest and the last bite of cheese fell from my lips. She was glowing. Literally glowing, as the power of her magery shone forth from her very skin, on this overcast day. Of her Barbarian guards I saw no sign, and I could not take my eyes off of Zia as she teleported along the leading edge of the demons, felling dozens with great bursts of electricity and raging waves of flame.

    More demons came, hungrily, savagely, insanely. They were blinded by rage, stomping over the bodies of their fallen comrades without hesitation. Zia destroyed them all, dancing back just out of reach, burning, freezing, and otherwise ending their foul lives with effortless precision. By the time I realized that the battle was moving rapidly towards me, and that even Zia could not kill all of those demons before they reached our hillside, my four fellows stood beside me, their wands at the ready.

    One spoke, his voice grim. "We must destroy the demons before we can deal with the girl. The chaos of battle is too great." I nodded, not sure who had spoken. It was hard to see anything else, think of anything else, when Zia was once again in my sight.

    We moved to join the battle, hurling our spells into the demonic hordes. I had never before fought such numbers, and it forced strange tactics upon me. Precision was not necessary. I simply had to cast the most damaging spells I could muster, as quickly as I could cast them. Everything found a target, and yet for all the death I dealt, the great mass of demons hardly seemed reduced. Beside me Maester Corwyn fell, skewered through the shoulder by a great lance of bone. When another of my Maesters was hamstrung by a spike-covered demon the size of a great cat, I cored it with a stream of lightning, then cried out a retreat.

    Seizing Corwyn, I teleported back once, then again, moving us a quarter mile over the rolling hills. To my right the other three Maesters appeared, two of them supporting the third. He could not stand, his left thigh ripped open, and when the man beside him slumped to his knees, they fell together. All of us were exhausted from the battle, and we could do no more than watch as Zia displayed spells that beggared our efforts. She was just one, but she moved so quickly there seemed several of her, darting along the irregular advance of the horde.

    She used few flames, since the demons were naturally resistant to fire, but when she sent snaking tendrils of flame forward, the monsters they struck fell and were still. For the most part she used ice, since it chilled and slowed the demons it did not kill outright, but when two huge berserkers stomped to the front of the ranks of the demons, Zia abandoned her hit and run tactics and made a stand.

    Fire was her element of choice, but this was no ordinary flame. I was reminded of the elemental power she'd tapped into that first time in classroom, and when she loosed blasts of white-hot flame, the demons were entirely incinerated. Her first volley tore through the advancing ranks, leaving naught but drifting ashes where a dozen demons had slavered. The power of this attack, able to reduce them to nothing, actually slowed the hordes, as those in front paused their advance and fell in behind the two goliaths. If Zia felt fear she did not show it, and as her flames continued to sear forth, growing in intensity, the towering demons toppled, their centipede legs burned out from underneath them. They were not alone, and as the fire spread, gusting out in all directions, I felt the heat, though I stood at least one hundred paces distant.

    The demonic horde paused, and was broken, their advance stopped by the wholesale obliteration of any who came within twenty paces of Zia. I could not pick out their leaders, but some demonic intelligence was ruling their behavior, for the creatures changed course, splitting into two groups and surging off to the west and east. Within their ranks were more of the siege beasts, monsters that towered taller than the largest buildings in Gea Kul, and as I watched them stomp away, their speed tremendous, the ground shaking beneath them, I wondered how humanity could ever hope to prevail against such beasts.

    I was pulled from my thoughts by a voice from my side. It was Corwyn, his voice weak, his face white from blood loss. "We are doomed." he said, and though I did not know if he referred to Zia or the demons, I found myself in agreement. I nodded, and was still nodding when a familiar feminine voice spoke from behind me.

    "Doomed indeed. Doomed from the moment you set foot in the Dreadlands."

    I turned, lightning already crackling along my fingers and through my wand, but it was too late. Zia had teleported into our midst, and she was upon us before any could react. Corwyn went first, a fountain of ice streaming into his face and snapping his spine. The spray of ice splashed across my chest as well, and I was hurled backwards. Falling, I saw only a glimpse of Zia's back, as she waved her hand and sent a scorching flame at my other two comrades, the heat of it powerful enough to rip the robes from their bodies before their skin began to blacken. I saw only that before I struck the hard earth, my arm crunching between my chest and a stone. Before that pain could fill me I heard a loud crack inside my skull, like a coconut had been dropped to a marble floor, and I knew no more.


    Chapter Sixteen

    When next I opened my eyes, it made little difference. My vision was blurred and my head ached so badly that I could not focus on my surroundings. I blinked several times, then squinted through the smoky air, but still saw little. I seemed to be in a large tent; I could just make out a sloping wall of tanned hide before me, and I felt more than saw a small fire crackling in a pit to my right. On the other side of the fire was a wide spread of sleeping furs, a weapon rack standing beside it. The rack was well loaded, with several swords, a huge axe, and one long spear upon which a bloody demon head was skewered. I saw no one, but I heard loud voices some distance away, shouting words in an unknown, guttural tongue.

    I hoped the voices would remain outside the tent for a while longer, since I was in no condition to face a friend, much less a potential foe. Besides my groggy head, a condition no doubt related to the fact that my right temple felt grossly swollen, my shoulder was throbbing terribly. Worse yet, my arms were numb and tied tightly behind my back, leather cords were knotted around my ankles, and a heavy strap was lashed around my waist and secured to a huge spike driven into the rocky earth beside me. I could scarcely budge, and wasn't sure that I wanted to as much as any movement hurt.

    Still, I had to try, and while I began trying to flex my fingers and toes to restore some circulation, I concentrated my thoughts. Most mages would have been helpless in such tethers, but I'd spent years of study at the Academy learning to cast spells without the aid of a focal device, or even the ability to move my hands. I was not up to any demanding magery at this moment, but I thought I could maintain a small flame below my ankles; one hot enough to burn through the bonds that held me.

    I was about to try, my thoughts focused by a moment of meditation, when the flap of the tent was thrown open and Zia walked in, a hulking brute of a Barbarian on her heels. At the sight of her I lost all concentration, and could do little more than stare up at her face as she walked around the fire. Her eyes were on me as well, and when the Barbarian stomped to the weapon rack she grunted a few words at him. He replied, his voice and language like the breaking of a stone, and after a long and very hostile look at me he leaned the demon-head spear over his shoulder and strode out of the tent, letting the flap fall closed behind him.

    This I saw only with my peripheral vision, for my eyes were focused entirely on Zia. She returned my gaze, a look of impatience on her face. I knew I must appear devoted to the point of derangement, but I could not help it. Lying there, I realized that I'd never expected to see her again, after she'd fled the Academy. True, I'd seen her earlier today, but that had only been from a distance, while she was routing the demonic hordes. Seeing her up close like this, in the soft light of a campfire... I could hardly breathe.

    I wanted to speak, to say something meaningful, intelligent, and conciliatory, but my thoughts were a jumble. It was Zia who finally broke the silence, her voice hard and cold.

    "You are the sole survivor, Yun. Your comrades, the Maesters you brought to hunt me, are dead. I killed them, and once the battle was over, Gothar used his great axe to hack their heads from their bodies. You know how Barbarians feel about Mages. Korth wanted to skewer their skulls on his spear, but I forbade it. My last gesture of respect to your Academy. I also forbade him to hew free your own skull, though I may yet grant him that pleasure."

    I did not reply. Zia waited a moment, then knelt down beside the fire, not far out of reach. If I'd had an arm free to reach for her, I might have done so. As it was I could only stare, while trying to compose my expression into something a bit less yearning and needy. Zia's face was older, worn and thinned by the ordeals she'd survived over the past four months. She had a scar, a long, narrow white line that ran from her right temple down to the corner of her mouth. It drew the eye, but only intensified her charms, like a cracked frame around a masterpiece work of art.

    I was lost, unable to speak. I opened my mouth anyway, with no idea what I was going to say.

    "I'm sorry, Zia. It was all my fault." The words surprised me, and they appeared to surprise Zia too, for she sat back on her heels, her lips twisted up the way they did when she was thinking hard. I was surprised by her reaction, as well as by my analysis of it. When had I begun to make such a careful study of her face and emotions?

    She did not remain silent for long, and after just a few seconds she replied, her voice harder than it had been previously. "Your apologies come too late, Archmaester. And they are unwanted!"

    She was angry, I realized. It was an odd realization, since I'd never seen her angry. I'd once had to encase her in ice, to stop her from melting the stones of the novice dormitory, but at that time she'd been out of her mind and silent. Not talking. Not turning those furious eyes on me. I'd seen her frustrated. I'd seen her scowling while concentrating so ferociously that her lips were snarling. But I'd never seen her angry. Quite the contrary -- Zia had almost always been happy and cheerful at the Academy, or at least she'd seemed that way. In retrospect I knew that she had often worn a mask, hiding her despair and depression behind a smiling face.

    I did not speak of that. I could not have; my thoughts and emotions were too confused. I did manage to reply to her, though. "I am Archmaester no longer, Zia. I resigned that position after your departure."

    "Resigned?" She scoffed, glaring at me. "They sacked you!"

    She was angry. Anger bordering on rage, and facing her fury, I felt stirrings of emotion within. I'd been numb for months, feeling nothing, caring not whether I lived or died. Even during the past few days, fighting for my life against demons in these Dreadlands, I'd been placid and calm to the point of disinterest. But now, as Zia's eyes sent daggers at me, I felt a stirring in my heart. I wanted to sooth her, make her understand that I'd never wanted things to go so badly, and I needed to do it quickly, before one of her savage protectors cleaved my head from my shoulders. I did not fear death, but I much desired to speak further with Zia before that final event.

    "I resigned." I repeated. "They might have voted me out, but I did not wait for that. I did not deserve to remain Archmaester, after failing so miserably at my most important duty. I'd failed to protect the students."

    Zia's reply was a snarl. "Protect the students! You drove me like a mule! Forced me into every class, mandated private lessons, raised me to fifth rank in a year, sent me hunting after ancient spells your Maesters were too stupid and lazy to find themselves!" She stopped abruptly, cutting herself off by leaping to her feet and starting to pace back and forth, too agitated to remain still.

    I spoke as she walked, my voice low and heavy with emotion. "No, I did not protect you. I was even worse at protecting the other Fifths."

    "Oh well." Zia muttered, her tone darkly cynical.

    I didn't know what to say; my thoughts were a swirling mess. I'd rehearsed this scene countless times in my mind, but in none of those trial runs had Zia been raging and unaffected by my attempted apologies. All I could do was watch her stalk back and forth inside the tent and try to guess what she might do next.

    Trying to make my mind work again, I took note of her clothing. She wore the same ragged leather as those filthy half-animal Barbarians, the tattered ends of the sleeves and legs showing how roughly the garments had been cut down to fit her. On her head was tied a dark red skull cap and the strands of hair that poked out from beneath it were dull with dirt; a far sight from the gleaming raven tresses she'd forever kept bouncing around her shoulders at the Academy. Yet she remained beautiful, radiant with her power and health. Even had I not known of her magery, I would have recognized her might and known to tread lightly.

    Those thoughts helped calm me, and my thoughts were focused when Zia abruptly ceased her pacing and turned to face me, her face twisted with anger and conflicted emotions.

    "I loved my time at the Academy, Yun. I learned so much, and was never bored. I liked working so hard, at so many things. And I enjoyed your private tutoring. But I hated every single student! They worked to earn my hate; the way those men panted after me, sniffing like dogs. The women were even worse, with their jealousy and gossip and lies! I nearly went back, once I was on that boat, hidden below decks and expecting a groping visit from the captain once the ship was safely out of the harbor. I nearly went back to your Academy to kill every one of them. Every man, every woman, and all the Maesters as well!"

    I felt cold and sick as I listened to her ravings. I was disgusted, not that she could say such things, but by the fact that she was so serious, and so full of hate. She did not mean that she wanted everyone to die. She meant that she wanted to kill them all. Personally.

    I tried a lighter reply, hoping some humor might please her, as it so often had in my office at the Academy. "I often felt the same way, when examination time came."

    Zia did not laugh, and when she looked up at me her face was wet with tears, though her eyes remained furious.

    "I wished only to help you learn, Zia." I said, my voice breaking with sorrow and sincerity. My chest ached as I struggled with unexpressed emotion. "I had your best interests at heart."

    "You!?" she cried, wiping roughly at the tears cutting tracks down her dirty cheeks. "You were the worst! Condescending! You always knew best, even when you knew nothing at all! Your hands on my shoulders, always touching! Your eyes on my body! You think I didn't know what you were thinking, when you watched me nap on the chair in your office? When you saw me in a tight blouse? You claimed to be my friend! My only and best friend. The one I could trust! And then you left me alone with Gutherie! You let the other Maesters work me to death!"

    Her outburst stunned me, and though I could hardly breathe, I could not look away. "Zia, I..."

    She was not finished, and cut me off before I could think of anything else to say. "You were the one I thought I could trust! The only one I could let my guard down around! I loved you, like an older brother. But you were the worst of them. At least the others were honest! They were dogs eager to rut, and they weren't afraid to say so. You wanted me just the same, but you hid your lust behind false concern and bloodless dispassion. Even Shien was ready to give up on you, after so many years waiting for your heart to do something more than pump blood."

    "Zia... I... I did care for you. I wanted what was best for you." I could hardly speak, her anger and accusations weighing on me like crushing stones. I was torn from within as well, as emotions I'd kept down for months came swirling up from within. I felt love, hate, anger, fear, and much more, all churning up from the maelstrom within my soul.

    "Everyone cared for me!" she cried, her voice desperate. "They cared so deeply that I might show them what swayed behind my tunic! Or let them pinch what hid beneath my robe. 'Knowledge isn't free, my dear.'"

    Her voice changed for the last five words, and I was shocked as I recognized the tone of Maester Cromwell in her impersonation. Cromwell was the chief librarian, revered by all, and I'd heard him intone that phrase a thousand times during my time at the Academy. But why did Zia bring it up now? Cromwell was well over a century old, and a devoted scholar; he couldn't possibly have...

    Zia was staring intently at me, watching me think, and when I blinked and focused my eyes on her, she uttered a harsh laugh and spoke in the bleakest tone she'd yet used. "Oh yes, Cromwell. Those rumors? His spidery fingers? What I did for him in exchange for access to the forbidden scrolls? You never believed those rumors, did you, Yun? How could they have been true, when I was your favorite, pure little pet?"

    She was right. I had never believed any of the rumors, and certainly not the ones slandering Maester Cromwell. I couldn't speak, and there was a sinking, miserable sensation washing over me. I could only stare at her while licking my lips and trying to swallow past the lump in my throat.

    "I spread my legs for half the Maesters in your Academy, Archmaester." said Zia, her voice cold and serious. Dropping one hand to her crotch, she squeezed it and spit into the fire. Two of the men you brought to kill me enjoyed this treasure. They must have hoped for one last taste, since they smiled when they saw me. They smiled as they died."

    I did not react. I could not; the shock had me immobilized. I'd never considered that those rumors about Zia... might be true? I could imagine that she might have kissed a student or two, and I'd sometimes flattered myself to think that she enjoyed the embraces shared with me... but sex? Molestation? Back at the Academy, I would not have believed anyone who told me that Zia had surrendered her body in exchange for favors. The very fact that there were so many rumors about her had helped me disregard them all. I'd especially disbelieved the ones about my fellow Maesters.

    "Oh, you're wondering about the students?" she asked. I shook my head, struck dumb. I had not been; I was too stunned by the thought of Maesters acting so inappropriately, but Zia took my gesture as a desperate refusal to believe. "I only let two of them have me, both Eights with access to books and spells I wanted to learn. They were insistent, and I only made them beg a little. Most of the others I did no more than tease. A little rub here or there, a press of my breasts against their arm, a flick of my tongue on their ear when I hugged them goodbye -- it seldom took more than that to get what I wanted."

    Again I shook my head, as overwhelmed by Zia's words as my own reaction. Months of sorrow, despair, and guilt were breaking apart inside me, like a great slab of ice floating over a boiling cauldron. I was betrayed, humiliated. This girl had played me for a fool! Leading me along by the nose, always letting me believe what I wanted to believe. No wonder the other Maesters had had their way with her. I'd set the example! What must the whole Academy have thought we were doing in my office during those private lessons?

    My shock was fading, but as it passed my anger grew. Zia had betrayed me. Stolen from my Academy. I'd been her best friend. Her mentor. I'd done all I could for her, bent and broken so many rules, nearly lost the entire Academy to protect her, before her ultimate departure had destroyed everything. And this was my thanks? This whore, trading her body for secrets that would have been given to her, and gladly, in the fullness of time. Trading it to everyone else, for nothing. And lying, with her every breath, to me!

    I knew it was horrible, and I hated myself for the thought, but I could not help it. She was a whore. A slut. One I'd desired more than any woman I'd ever known. She'd given herself to everyone else. Hadn't I been her best friend? Her only friend? How could she not have told me? How could she not have turned to me for comfort?

    "Why not me!" I growled, my voice bestial. I had not meant to speak aloud, but Zia heard me and laughed, the sound musical and taunting.

    "Because you gave me what I wanted without such persuasions, Archmaester."

    I shook my head at that, unable to speak. I had not meant that. I had never wanted her body. Her trust, her faith, her friendship, yes. But not what she held between her thighs. What had she done for those men? What had they done to her? How could she have let them, when her beauty, personality, and talent would surely have earned her the same opportunities, with just a little patience?

    "I might have, if you'd asked." she sneered, her voice turned cruel and teasing. "It would hardly have been fair to Shien, though."

    I shook my head again, images of Zia lifting her skirts and lying back filling my head. She was so beautiful, but the act was grotesque, the lusting faces of Maesters leering over her, their ancient, withered bodies naked as they threw off their robes in their haste to avail themselves of the garden of delights Zia offered up to them.

    Shutting my eyes, those images vanished as Shien's face appeared. Zia had mentioned her several times, and in such a strange way. Did Zia think that Maester Shien harbored those sorts of feelings for me? I'd never thought of that, but as I remembered Shien's voice when I led my party of death away from the Academy, I heard again the desperate plea in her cry. Would a woman, one who was just a friend, have sounded so wretched?


    Chapter Seventeen


    Zia's smirking face tore me from my thoughts, and as I met her grin, my face hot, puffy, and wet with tears, she smiled more widely. She was enjoying this. Seeing me brought low. That realization stirred further the simmering stew inside me, and I felt my concentration drawing down to a point, my senses sharpening. During the months since her departure, I'd never felt any desire to punish Zia. I'd viewed her as a victim and blamed myself for those disastrous events. I had not objected to my place on this failed death squad, but I'd hoped I would die before I saw Zia fall.

    Now, for the first time, a desire for revenge hatched within me. Not for the murdered Fifths, and not for my shattered pride, but for my clan. This woman, this brilliant girl, had lied and stolen from my Academy. She had never intended to live up to her vows and promises. She'd endured the brands and tattoos and rituals not out of loyalty, or pride, but as the price she had to pay for knowledge. To her, those sacred rites were no different than spreading her legs in a Maester's study, hiking up her skirts as she bent over a chair, or licking her lips while unbuttoning a man's trousers. She had profaned the discipline, and violated my Academy! And for that, she deserved to die.

    The change in my thinking must not have shown on my face, since Zia kept smirking, even after she took a long drink from a wine skin slung over a low stool beside the fire. "Tell me, former Archmaester Yun. Who is the new Archmaester? Did you hand pick your successor, as carefully as you picked your favorite students?"

    "Gutherie." I said, grunting the word through clenched teeth. I still could not move my fingers, but my toes were beginning to tingle as I concentrated and forced magical energy to flow through my body. My bonds were expertly tied, the knots viciously tight. They could not have been released except by cutting them, and I was sure Zia had never intended to do so. She'd kept me alive only to taunt me, only to confess her harlotry to. Only to stab me in the back one last time.

    "Gutherie?" Zia exclaimed, genuine surprise in her voice. "That buggering bastard?" Her face showed shock and disgust. "I lied when I said you were the worst, Yun. Gutherie was the worst. His endless questions and suspicion. And his appetites! Such perversion. I never felt more dirty than after those long minutes, bent over a chair for his stubby, arse-stabbing fingers. He wanted me to lick them, afterwards. He swore I'd enjoy it. He wanted me to lick them clean, then kiss him."

    I coughed, her revelation almost enough to shake my concentration. I had never imagined I might return to the Academy. I still could not believe that was my fate, but if I should somehow survive this night, and find my way back to Gea Kul, I would have words with Gutherie. More than words. There would be a reckoning, should I return to the Academy, a bloody, tattooed, and branded flap of Zia's skin strung to my belt.

    That thought in my head, I looked at Zia, and something in my eyes warned her. Lightning crackled over her fingers, my death within her grasp, but I was already moving, my vision blurring as I teleported out of the ropes, leaving even my clothing behind in my haste. The flash of lightning was blinding in the dim tent, but while her bolts were still scorching my abandoned garments, I had launched my own counter attack. I felt the skin on my arms prickling with cold as a blast of icy air rushed down my arms, propelled straight at Zia's back.

    The first spell just grazed her, chance and speed saving her from a jet of cold that would have knocked her instantly unconscious, if not killing her outright. My left leg was still wobbly and half-asleep, and it had given way just as I cast the spell, causing my aim to swing right. To her credit, Zia had sensed my teleportation faster than I would have believed, and had ducked as she turned. The blast of cold still struck her, but across the shoulder and upper back instead of the head. My magic hurled her forward and dashed the cap from her head, but she landed on the heap of sleeping furs and was trying to roll over as I tracked her, hurling a volley of frigid blasts at her.

    My aim was poor, but the target was very near, and of the half dozen projectiles I launched, three struck her solidly. Two into her legs, one into her lower back, one into the ground, and two others against the far wall of the tent, where their intense cold instantly cracked the hide, causing it to contract as though a fist had clenched the leather from the outside.

    Zia was immobilized and stunned, but not dead, and as I hobbled closer to be sure I did not miss, I was distracted by the sight. Her face was up, and though her eyes were glazed she was still so very beautiful. Memories filled my head, thoughts of her laughing voice, bright eyes, and cheerful personality staying my killing spell.


    Chapter Eighteen

    The delay was not long, but it was long enough, and only a reflexive teleport saved me from being cut in half when a Barbarian streaked into the tent, his great axe flashing through the spot where I'd been standing a blink before. The momentum of his charge was so great that he passed straight through the other side, ripping loose a large piece of the tanned leather and knocking down one of the long posts that supported the tent from the outside.

    His two fellows were not far behind, and before I could turn back towards Zia, the other two savages burst through the door flap, bristling with battle rage and wielding huge swords. They were clearly expecting me to run, or to shower them with ineffective elemental spells. I did neither, and before they could advance I took a breath and teleported across the tent, straight at them. Neither was quick enough to react when I appeared behind them and reached out, laying my hands on their shoulders. They hardly had time to realize I was touching them before I dug in my fingers and teleported again, throwing myself blindly backwards out of the tent and pulling the Barbarians along with me.

    We appeared far from the tent, and several feet above the ground. I'd aimed high, in case there were rocks or other obstacles outside. There were none, and I released my grip on the Barbarians and pushed off even as we fell to the ground. I landed on my feet and fell heavily, rolling over backwards and sprawling on the rocky ground. It hurt, but as I gasped for breath I laughed, for I'd fared far better than the Barbarians.

    My desperate gambit had worked perfectly, and the two mighty men were now joined together, fused through the torso and arm. They had become one, one huge and impossibly ugly man, with four legs, two heads, and three arms. One man's arm was vanished into the other's body, and that was the least of his wounds, as the one-armed man gave a gurgling scream and vomited up a fountain of blood, his legs giving out.

    The other Barbarian was less wounded, and he tried to stand, lifting his comrade on nerveless legs. The other man was beyond standing; some internal organs must have been ruptured by the fusing, and he was dying already, even as the other man struggled, pushing madly against the body that had been so suddenly joined to his own.

    Such an enchantment was almost unimagined, but I'd envisioned it a decade ago, and practiced it several times with sticks and other inanimate objects. It was horribly difficult; a perversion of the physical dissolution required to teleport, and I hadn't been at all sure I could manage it with such large targets. Neither had I been sure they would be killed by the maneuver, but clearly the damage was too terrible for either man to consider hacking off his extra arms and legs and coming at me while the stumps spurted their joined blood.

    There had been three Barbarians, I remembered, and just as I tore my eyes from the abomination I'd fashioned, the other Northman returned. He came charging around the side of the tent, the axe held over his shoulder large enough to cleave an ox in two. If the sight of his conjoined comrades started him, he showed no sign, and hurdled them, catapulting high over the monstrosity, his mighty axe glowing with a blue light as he soared straight at me like some great vulture.

    I could not kill him from a distance, not as exhausted as I was, but Zia's murderous escape from the Academy had given me an idea, and I knew it was my only chance. Moving as quickly as my muscles would allow, I sent a burst of sparks up with my left hand, then took a step to the side, focusing the rest of my energy into my right hand.

    The sparks were no real attack, not against this foe. They were bright enough to blind him though, and dazzled by them, the Barbarian had to guess which direction I'd moved. If he'd guessed right he would have split me like a log. He did not, though it was a near thing; I felt the cold radiating from his weapon as it whistled past me, close enough for the wind to ruffle my hair. The axe head buried itself in the ground, a minor explosion and shock wave emanating from the weapon and the Barbarian's thunderous landing.

    I dove at him, forcing myself through the waves of power his impact had unleashed, and just managed to reach his hip with my right hand. My touch was light, hardly powerful enough to break an egg, but my arm was surging with power, and I instantly sent it forth, releasing a volcanic heat into the Barbarian's body.

    I'd hoped to send it higher, where it might have scorched his lungs and boiled his heart. The attack was less effective at his waist, but the heat was sufficient to set his intestines to bubbling, and the pain and shock doubled him over. Gagging, the Barbarian fell to his knees, holding his belly and writhing. I was too tired to cast another spell and too weak to pick up his huge axe. Fortunately, one of the other Barbarian's swords had tumbled some distance from their mutated, fused corpse, which was still slowly flopping on the ground, and with only a few steps I reached the sword. Lifting it was a struggle, but I dragged it behind me as I staggered back to the third Barbarian, then stabbed the sword down at him once I was within reach.

    My aim was poor; I was no fighter; but he was defenseless and the blade was sharp, and one strike was sufficient to spear him through the lower back. It was easy, no harder than sticking a chunk of meat on a skewer, and when the impact with the ground knocked the sword from my hands, I let it fall. The man was cooked from within and stabbed cleanly through the back. Let another Barbarian come along and chop off his head, if they needed such assurances of death.

    Stumbling back towards the tent, I spared a glance at the first two Barbarians. One was still moving, but slowly, his bloody fingers clawing desperately at the hard earth. I paid him no mind, leaving the savages to die in the darkness. At that moment I wanted nothing more than to sit by a warm fire and wrap myself in a thick blanket. I was shivering, despite the effort I'd exerted. I was naked, after all, my clothing still wrapped up in the ropes I'd teleported out of, just a moment or two earlier. It seemed like it had been much longer than that, and I could only hope that Zia had not recovered. If she had some fight back in her, I feared she would best me with ease, in my current condition.


    Chapter Nineteen


    To my surprise and relief, Zia remained on the blankets, her legs and back still white with ice. I could sense no power building in her, and I did not wait for that to change. Picking the shortest sword from the weapon rack, I held it before me as I advanced on her. She heard me, and was conscious enough to turn her head and claw at the furs with her hands, though her lower body remained unresponsive. She lifted one arm to fend me off, but I swept it aside and drove the sword at her face as I collapsed to my knees beside her, expecting to see terror in her eyes.

    I did not, and Zia didn't even flinch. She faced the blade fearlessly, almost welcomingly, and that attitude was what stayed my strike. I almost killed her by accident, my body so exhausted that it was hardly under my control, but I managed to halt the blade with the edge just pressing against her throat. She did not shrink from it, but laid still, even as blood seeped from the cut and dripped down to the edge, still pressed against her skin.

    A moment passed, long enough for the fire to return some warmth to my bare feet. We remained motionless, my right hand gripping the pommel of the sword, my left clenching Zia's leather tunic, giving her no chance to wriggle free. Blood continued to ooze from the cut I'd made on her throat, but she made no move to staunch it, or to resist me in any way.

    "So, Yun. You have me in bed at last. Will you stake your claim on the prize that so many of your peers have already tasted?"

    I lifted my head, only then realizing the position we were in. I was too tired, too ragged to feel embarrassed, so I merely shook my head and tightened my grip on the handle of the sword. My eyes kept returning to her blood, and when enough of it had pooled on the sword to coat the blade, I felt my head clear a bit. I shut my eyes tightly and shook my head, then lifted up a bit, rising to my knees.

    "Your protectors are finished," I said, unnecessarily.

    "I know." Zia replied, her voice as calm as if we'd been sipping tea in my office. "I could sense your magic. An impressive feit, the one you used to kill Korth and Harl. You did not teach me all you knew."

    I felt strangely complimented by her words, but replied critically. "I would have taught you. Though I've never shared that spell with anyone else. But you were slow to learn the teleporting techniques."

    "And I thought you held it back since I held back from you?" Her voice was sarcastic now, weak as it was. Again, I could only shake my head. I felt a sort of revulsion for the woman Zia had become. How had I thought her innocent and pure?

    As if determined to destroy my illusions entirely, she spoke again, her voice yet more angry and cynical. "Those Barbarians taught me more than I learned in your Academy, Yun. And I paid for my knowledge the only way I knew. They shared me, in their bed. All three of them every night. All three at once, sometimes."

    I listened, more confused than offended. She was trying to shock me. Was she trying to anger me? With my sword at her throat? I couldn't understand it, until suddenly it came clear. I'd spent months with my head hung low, waiting for a chance to die at Zia's hands. It appeared that I was not the only one so afflicted. Zia wanted to die. That was why she fought so fearlessly and recklessly against the demons. That was why she'd spared my life. She'd known I would escape those bonds. She'd wanted to die by my hand. And still did, to judge by the words she was speaking.

    Zia might have expected death, since she did not meet my eyes for a moment. When she finally lifted them, meeting my gaze, she extended her chin slightly, baring more of her throat to my blade. More blood trickled down, and I waited, motionless, unsure what I was going to do next. Zia's hand shocked me back into motion when it crept down and grasped the dirty, blood-splattered tip of my penis. I nearly beheaded her in surprise, then lifted up, trying to move out of her reach. I could not, but it took several seconds before I realized she was not attacking me. She was caressing me!

    "They were wonderful lovers, those Barbarians. As gentle with me as they were ruthless with the demons. With them I found a compassion and acceptance I never knew in your Academy."

    As she spoke Zia continued sliding her fingers over the length of my dangling penis, until I finally managed to react. Releasing the hold I had on her leather jersey, I ripped her hand away and slammed it down into her chest, turning my right wrist and striking her jaw sharply with the side of the blade. She grunted and jerked her head back, but reacted no more than that, and I managed not to finish her when I pressed the blade back against the side of her neck.

    "Your mind has been poisoned, Zia. I never wanted that from you. I would never have taken that from you."

    I meant it, and I could see that my words and actions had stunned Zia. She opened her mouth, then merely licked her dirty, blood-flecked lips while her wide, shocked eyes searched my face. I was hardly less overwhelmed than her, both by her revelations and my own reactions to them. I'd spent months wanting to die, and had expected to do so tonight. Now, I was no longer sure. Zia's confession had shocked me into anger and given me the drive to murder her and to defeat those Barbarians. I'd spent my rage in that confrontation, and as soon as I reentered the tent, my old fondness for Zia had returned, just in time to stop me from beheading her.

    I no longer knew how I felt about her. I did not want to murder her, well though she deserved that fate. The fond, protective, friendship I'd always felt had been ripped away by her vile words, but the fact that she so clearly wished for death at my hands, as I once had at hers, was shocking.

    "I stole from your Academy. I killed your students. I killed your friends this very evening."

    Zia's voice pulled my attention back to her face, and I saw that she was crying again, tears running down her face in almost as rich a profusion as the blood that streaked her neck. And at that moment, I knew what to do.

    "Zia." I said, my voice steady. She started at the sound, the words she'd been about to speak lost with a sudden exhale of breath. "I love you. You are the daughter I never had. And I forgive you."

    With that I stood up and pitched the sword away. Though my legs were unsteady I stepped back to stand beside the fire, pulling a soft pelt off of the bed and wrapping it around my bare shoulders.

    She did not move for a moment, then was on her feet in a blink, fire swirling around her in a cloud. Her eyes glowed, a faint trace of silver in them, but as the flames descended around me, she shook her head and flickered her fingers, dispelling the blaze before it could do more than singe the hairs on my head and on the fur I'd taken to cover my nudity.

    "Defend yourself!" she cried, flames licking over her hands and up her arms. I shook my head.

    "You hounded me from your Academy! You killed my lovers and only true companions! I will kill you!" I shook my head again, and at that gesture Zia screamed in frustration and hurled her flames up and out. They rose up all around us, and the tanned hide of the tent was incinerated in a blink by a column of fire that erupted into the sky, turning night to day. I squinted at the conflagration, but took no other action, and when Zia strode towards me, silver in her eyes and killing energy in her glowing hands, I stood motionless.

    She was upon me in an instant, her hands reaching up to wrap around my throat. I felt the heat of them, painful but not scorching, and expected to feel my heart burst as the blood boiled through my chest. It did not, and after a moment the heat faded entirely as Zia collapsed, sobbing as she clung to me. I held her then, tears rising to my eyes as the ashes of the tent swirled around us and starlight shone from the sky above.


    Epilogue

    A week later I stood at the railing of a small ship as the crew rowed it away from the shore of the Dreadlands while the captain worked to raise the sails. Behind us, on the shore, the party of warriors who had arrived on the ship were hurriedly arranging their belongings as they prepared for the trek north. They'd come to battle the demons emerging from the Hellgates, dreams of glory and fantasies of the legendary Witch Girl filling their heads.

    I'd let them chant and cheer when I boarded the ship, watching and rubbing the blackened skin at my throat while they exulted in their coming triumphs. They would find demons, of course, and most likely die at their scaled and hooked hands, before being trampled into the earth by thousands of marching, hoofed feet. They would not find the witch girl though, for she had departed before me, heading south and west, into the Barbarian lands.

    Zia was done with battling demons. She meant to find the families of her three Barbarian companions, to tell them where, if not how, their sons had perished. After that she hoped to travel south, perhaps to Westmarch, where her uncle served. Zia had fond memories of him from her childhood, but had not seen him in a decade or more.

    I had not considered traveling with her, nor had I asked her to accompany me back to Gea Kul. My place was at the Academy, and there was no way she could return. Not after the way she'd departed. Not after slaughtering the Fifths. Not even if the Archmaester pardoned her and rescinded the death warrant. Which he was going to do, as soon as I took back that rank. Gutherie had stolen the throne and risen to lead the Academy with the most foul deceptions, and was not fit to hold the title he now enjoyed. I'd known that even before Zia's testimony, but hadn't cared to act. Now I'd recovered myself I did, and knowing what he'd done to Zia only hardened my resolve.

    As for the other Maesters, punishments would have to be meted out for those who had betrayed their duties. Taking advantage of a student was forbidden, no matter how irresistible the student might have been, or how willing she had seemed. I had not yet decided upon what form those reprisals would take, but I hoped Maester Shien would assist me in making that determination.

    If she could forgive me. Forgiveness was only the first of many favors I meant to ask of her.





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    I love to discuss fiction, including my own, so expect some words here.

    Trivia time: The three main chars (Yun, Shien, Zia) have names taken from the characters/actors who portrayed them in a popular action/adventure/romance film. The relationship between those characters is quite similar to the triangle presented in my story. (It was a closer match in the early planning, but then Shien's roll was reduced somewhat, and a fourth, younger male character, was not included at all.)

    The film? Since no one guessed... Crouching Tiger, Hidden Dragon.


    The character of Zia and the overall situation was inspired by the official char background of the D3 Wizard. That's a fairly archetypal story; brilliant, cocky young student proves too powerful and headstrong to submit to formal education, etc. I didn't make Zia like that in personality, but in talent, yes. I thought it would be more interesting to examine that story from the personal level. What's it like for that student? Younger than everyone else, so powerful you can't really control yourself, under constant pressure from your teachers, etc, and by making Zia beautiful and accidentally flirty the interpersonal stuff became more complicated.

    Yun and Zia are also partially based on... me and a young female (former?) friend of mine. She was mostly a good friend, sometimes a best friend, and occasionally a girlfriend, for a couple of years. I wasn't teaching her anything in a formal setting, but I often felt like Yun does in the story, with this willful, spontaneous, unpredictable, gorgeous, constantly boy-troubled younger female friend seeking my advice and tutoring. I wasn't as monk-like as Yun in restraining my affections, and the woman in question wasn't quite as young as Zia, and wasn't a prodigy in any field, but she was as attractive as Zia is, Zia's personality is an idealized version of hers. Especially in regards to other men, since she was constantly getting into situations like Zia's, where her friendliness was (hopefully) interpreted by every guy as potential romance.

    Our parting wasn't unlike the one in the story either; no bodies, but painful revelations that she'd actually been a lot more sexual (with other guys) than she'd always led me to believe in conversation. I haven't hunted her down to kill her, but neither have we spoken since some big arguments and our reconciliation remains hypothetical.

    In light of that, I found the story odd and sometimes difficult to write, but also somewhat cathartic, since I had to go back in my memories to remember how obsessive and concerned and repressively-horny I felt for her, and I kind of poured that out into Yun's character. And then edited it somewhat to make it match the situation in the story, but the emotion was there.

    It was doubly odd since I've been in a good relationship with a woman who is more my own age (and is much more mature and stable than the Zia type) for several months, since shortly after my RL Zia blow up, making her sort of the Shien character. And that relationship has certainly helped me to not regret or want back the drama of my RL Zia, which made delving back into those feelings in my mind all the odder, and yet easier/less painful as well.

    Below is a picture of me with the real life Zia inspiration, before we attended a wedding (not ours) in November 2008. Yes, her face is pixeled out, but you can probably still tell that she's pretty hot? If not, take my word for it.



    Or at least she seemed hot to me, as Zia does to Yun, during the heat of their infatuation. I meant to have Yun reflect at some point after the final confrontation that Zia didn't seem as pretty as she used to. But that didn't fit in, and besides, she was scabby from months in the wild, injured, malnourished, in rags, etc. Of course she was less attractive.

    I've put various autobiographical scenes/characters/moments into my longer writing, novels and such that aren't Diablo related, but this was the longest, most direct insertion from my real life into anything I've written, and it was odd to do it, even in the radically different fantasy setting. I had a couple of female friends (one of them my current GF) read over this story in rough draft form to give me feedback on how the characters and emotional events worked. I wasn't at all sure that, to an objective reader, the first 12 chapters wouldn't be unreadable, with Yun endlessly pining over and obsessing about this girl who is clearly unworthy of his attention.

    They both said it worked okay, though based on their feedback I did make some fairly substantial changes to Yun's reactions and behavior during the ending confrontation. At first he had a lot more angry thoughts about Zia betraying him on a personal level, and admitted more to his long-repressed lust. That didn't work in the story though, since it wasn't how Yun felt about Zia, so changes were made for the betterment of the story.


    It was a happy, or at least convenient coincidence, that my recent RL relationship events so neatly overlapped with the D3 Wizard's char background, and they both converged over the events/characters of the aforementioned film. So conveniently that I felt I had to honor the movie/admit to my borrowing by using the character names. That and I can never think of good character names, so it saved me some trouble on that front.

    And no, you're not required to care about any of this to enjoy, or not, the story.


    I'm curious for feedback of whatever sort, but especially from people who have read my earlier Diablo fan fic. How did this one work compared to those others, which were almost entirely action-packed and had only minimal character based events? (Sadly, most of those aren't back online yet, though last year's D3 Halloween story, and my misguided attempted entry into the recent Bliz FF contest is online, and it's fairly representative of my usual Diablo FF style.)

    A story has to be longer and more detailed to get this much character interaction in. You've got to take time to care about the characters and see them through some ups and downs, and since my Diablo Fan Fic has generally been written very quickly before some holiday, and it's just for fun, I don't spend that much time or thought on it, and haven't written anything long enough to really develop characters. Hence action-heavy, shorter pieces trading heavily on the character archetypes created in the game. I think that approach works well enough for short pieces, but I think a longer one with more char development makes for a better story; YMMV, of course.



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    Hey Flux,

    Long time reader, and a member of the community since sometime in 2000 or 2001, although admittedly I don't contribute much. I've read all of your works as they came out, and definitely enjoyed the decahedrons and holiday stories. So take this as you will, since so much time has passed in between.

    To begin, I must say that the story was really well written. The background was compelling, interesting, and really drew me in. Thankfully I waited for the third part to be posted before starting, as I just read through the whole thing in one go, and I don't think I could have waited between each part. While reading it, I couldn't help but feel there was a more personal connection in the story, which makes more sense since you've posted the trivia.

    Furthermore, I know that I'm biased. I prefer in-depth stories, especially ones that play with emotions, far more than action and jokes. As such, I'm instantly in favour of this type of work over your past efforts, which were more light-hearted. Not that the past stories were bad, as I certainly enjoyed them, but this one was much more serious. In my opinion, it more closely matches the world of Diablo, which added to the immersion, and was another one of the factors that drew me in. Comedy is great for a break, but any long story like this feels much more natural in a more serious setting. That, and it makes me want to re-read it afterwards, to see what I missed.

    There were parts I felt could use improvement, and parts that I disagreed with, but I know that there always will be. Everyone has different opinions. It would have been nice of Shien played more of a role in the later portions. Obviously that's harder with the large division between her and Yun, but in space and mind, but I think that there could have been more involvement. Maybe not, but I found Shien noticeably absent from the later half, considering her "main character" status.

    Quote Originally Posted by Flux
    I wasn't at all sure that, to an objective reader, the first 12 chapters wouldn't be unreadable, with Yun endlessly pining over and obsessing about this girl who is clearly unworthy of his attention.
    In all honesty, I loved the first 12 chapters. It was quite the lead up, and you definitely were building the tension. Something was coming, and you could guess what it was, but you wanted to know why. You wanted to hear the stories behind the events. I'll admit that parts of the beginning are a bit repetitive, and at times I think that there was a bit too much foreshadowing, but it was enjoyable nonetheless.

    In summary, I think that it was a fantastic story. My criticisms above are in an effort to find the small flaws, as it would have been a lot easier to go on about the good parts only, which wouldn't have provided many ideas for improvement in the future. I know I'm just one voice, and I'm sure many people will enjoy the very things I picked out, and dislike what I loved, but the above are my personal opinions.

    Great work, Flux, and thank you for the wonderful story. I hope to read more from you in the future.

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    Quoting a comment on the story by Killamike, posted to my user profile page.

    regarding your book :P

    i found it quite fascinating. it is good, with twists and good for a novel.

    but thinks i would like to point out that i would prefer to read in book:

    3rd person writing only, it looks more professional and lets mind a lot of free space to think of its own, making your story more interesting.

    about powers: it is all good that she has good great powers, but if she could learn that fast, it would be no point for her even to stay there, more interesting would have been that she just wanted to learn a lot of new information, and then by being very disappointed by what she being taught, just went rebellious and destroyed half of the world, or something like that :P


    but some how your story sounds VERY close to black magician trilogy: http://www.trudicanavan.com/aboutbooks.php

    also, chapters are a bit small, and i want bigger book ( am i asking too much? ^^ )

    other wise, i am waiting for more ^_^
    I've long since given up worrying about stories that are similar to others are that have similar elements. There's just too much cool fantasy material out there, between novels, comics, anime, etc. I've many times read something years later that was very similar to an element I wrote (and that the creator of the other stuff could never have seen), or seen things in anime or films that I'd long though about and wanted to write, but hadn't gotten to yet.

    I've never heard of this series, but I'll put it on my ever-expanding list of books to check out, some day. It's funny, my recent story was basically a fusion of the D3 wiz lore and the char archetypes from Crouching Tiger, Hidden Dragon (which no one has guessed/named yet, based on the hints I gave), with much of Zia's experiences taken from those of a RL friend of mine. And somehow that winds up being (apparently) similar to some other fantasy novel series.

    As for 3rd person being more professional? I've never heard that opinion previously. It's definitely easier for the author, especially if it's done omniscient style, which is why most books use it. I generally prefer (and use) a sort of 3rd person roving PoV, but without much/any omniscient, for reasons I would be happy to elaborate on, but would go too long for this space.

    I didn't really plan this one as a 1st person reminiscence, but it unfolded that way from the beginning and that made it a much more personal, emotional tale from the PoV of Yun, and kept it a bit smaller and more focused on the main chars. Which was useful, since the story got way longer than anticipated anyway.

    Also, I didn't and don't have any plans for a sequel, though a few people have asked about it. The focus of and reason to write this story for me was to explore the relationship between Yun and Zia when she was in the Academy, largely since that paralleled some RL events in my life, as elaborated in the author's note after the story. I don't really care that much about any of the characters in their separate lives, now that they're not interacting in that specific way. I'm sure that at some point I'll write some more D3 fan fic, but I don't have any other stories in mind right now. Perhaps the 5th char type reveal and their lore will spark something in my muse, come next fall/Halloween?



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    Re: D3 Story: The Mage Academy of Gea Kul

    Hi, Flux. Took me a while to get around to reading this.

    So, first off, the things I liked about the story. I think the story fit very nicely into the Diablo world, and the details you offered about the academy and the surrounding city made the setting easy to visualize. Technically, the writing is nearly flawless. I saw two mistakes in the entire piece when I read it, but scanning back through, I wasn't able to find them. Your writing style flows naturally and you make interesting, but (mostly) not distracting word choices. The sexual element was unexpected and uncomfortable, so it served its purpose well.

    Where I found the biggest problems was in your descriptions of Zia. There is a lot of telling, a lot of adjectives to describe her, which makes me wonder if you didn't have a good grasp of her character. From the first paragraphs of Chapter One, she is "remarkable", "beautiful", "unforgettable", "friendly", "cheerful", "enticing", with "astonishing talent". We also find out that she reads to the point of being a road hazard, is self-confident and fearless, and has an extremely high pain tolerance. In short, she is perfect beyond a few charming quirks, and perfectly unbelievable. I felt like the first ten chapters dragged, and I think a lot of it had to do with my dislike of Little Miss Perfect, who I didn't feel had really earned the praise being heaped on her. The fact that I already knew she was going to do something reprehensible didn't help matters. You could say that it just goes to show how misled the Archmaester is, but I think that just turns him into a pitiable fool. I don't know that the story calls for her to show real flaws, but I do think that the praise needs to come down a notch or two.

    One suggestion I can think of to make Zia more real is to look for ways to transform static descriptions of her into moments in time. When you say someone is "cheerful", it is because you have observed them over time and seen that they respond to adversity with hope and have watched them find the joy in tedium. Someone who is "friendly" welcomes strangers and tries to put them at ease. When I write a character, I find out (and show the reader) who they are by what they do, how they react, and I think that's what you need to do here.

    3rd person writing only, it looks more professional and lets mind a lot of free space to think of its own, making your story more interesting.
    No, absolutely no. I couldn't disagree any more firmly. "The Adventures of Huck Finn", "The Great Gatsby", "Lolita" and "The Catcher in the Rye" could have been written in third-person, but they would not be the same stories, and I think might possibly have not been "great" books if they had. Viewpoint is just another of the implements in a writer's toolbox. I usually don't pick a viewpoint in advance. Instead, I begin to write, and the viewpoint is whatever seems most natural for the story I'm trying to tell.

    at times I think that there was a bit too much foreshadowing,
    I agree. The foreshadowing definitely felt heavy-handed. Toning it down would improve the story IMHO.




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    Flux, it would be interesting to see Shien and Yun finally create the relationship for which Shien has long yearned. Also, there is SO much potential for Yun, Shien, and Zia to be called into service and hopefully ally against the demonic horde! Keep up the creativity!



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    I think I'll be able to read this guy soon, with the tiny holiday break I'm going to get.

    I glanced across and someone said that third person narrative is more "professional"? That doesn't really make sense.

    You pick a perspective depending on the content of the story. Typically, if you are going to use a third-person omniscient, it's because you want a farther psychic distance from the characters. The opposite is true for first person narratives; first person narratives tend to be a much closer and more character-focused story. It has nothing at all even remotely to do with "professionalism".

    I don't know if I'll be able to make editing comments but I am going to read it soon and post some impressions.



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    Quote Originally Posted by tamrend View Post
    Where I found the biggest problems was in your descriptions of Zia. There is a lot of telling, a lot of adjectives to describe her, which makes me wonder if you didn't have a good grasp of her character. From the first paragraphs of Chapter One, she is "remarkable", "beautiful", "unforgettable", "friendly", "cheerful", "enticing", with "astonishing talent". We also find out that she reads to the point of being a road hazard, is self-confident and fearless, and has an extremely high pain tolerance. In short, she is perfect beyond a few charming quirks, and perfectly unbelievable. I felt like the first ten chapters dragged, and I think a lot of it had to do with my dislike of Little Miss Perfect, who I didn't feel had really earned the praise being heaped on her. The fact that I already knew she was going to do something reprehensible didn't help matters. You could say that it just goes to show how misled the Archmaester is, but I think that just turns him into a pitiable fool. I don't know that the story calls for her to show real flaws, but I do think that the praise needs to come down a notch or two.

    One suggestion I can think of to make Zia more real is to look for ways to transform static descriptions of her into moments in time. When you say someone is "cheerful", it is because you have observed them over time and seen that they respond to adversity with hope and have watched them find the joy in tedium. Someone who is "friendly" welcomes strangers and tries to put them at ease. When I write a character, I find out (and show the reader) who they are by what they do, how they react, and I think that's what you need to do here.
    One of my RL friends who read a rough draft of this story said Zia was verging into Mary Sue territory early on. Which is more or less what your comments here assert, without actually using the term.

    Incidentally, Mary Sue/Gary Stu chars are definitionally the writer's projection of themselves into the story. Bella in the Twilight series, for instance. (Which I wrote about with many words and some humor on my blog, if anyone's curious.) That's not accurate in this case, since as I admitted in the notes, Yun is actually the "me" character, as this story is (in some ways) the most/only autobiographical story I've ever written.

    That digression aside, the issue of Zia being "too perfect" is a valid one. There are 2 obvious fixes, as I see it. 1) Make her less perfect, (she's ultimately revealed to be far from perfect, but not until the later chapters, which doesn't affect the reader's opinion of her early on), or 2) Make clearer that the descriptions of her are coming from the smitten and quite biased Yun, and may not correspond very closely to reality.

    I didn't really delve into the issue of Yun being an unreliable narrator in this story, but I meant him to be one, at least somewhat. He's not totally crazy or delusional, but his judgment is to be suspected in his evaluations of Zia, and in his own opinions about her. Fairly early on he thinks something like, "But my thoughts about the girl were never sexual, I assure you." which was meant (by me) to be patently absurd. It wasn't taken that way by every reader, though, and my GF (current GF, not the one who inspired the Zia char; she was many months ago) specifically commented on that line as seeming to be an error, since it was so obviously not true.



    I agree. The foreshadowing definitely felt heavy-handed. Toning it down would improve the story IMHO.
    This one amused me, since I generally hate foreshadowing. I think most authors overdo it in an annoying, intrusive way, almost as if they're showing off the fact that they know what's going to happen later on.

    I didn't plan this story to be told 1st person or with the first 75% in flashback, but it unfolded that way as I started writing it, and it seemed natural as it proceeded. I put in a few other bits of foreshadowing during the first school part since I figured the months of "Zia learns really quickly" would get repetitious and drag, without some hints at the coming action/conflict. But since no one has complained about that part feeling too long, perhaps it wasn't necessary...



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