A new poem

[Bereyn]

I just wrote this poem a short while ago. It was inspired by the poem in the Book of the Blind in Diablo 1. Hope you like it.

The Chamber of Bone

Down in the darkness of the old Monastary
There lies a danger for those unwary
The bleached-white bones of he undead flower
From which most men would run or cower
An army of skeletons with shield and sword
Hundreds of archers, with arrows that gore
And the Undead King sitting on his throne
Await you down in the Chamber of Bone

Let me know what you think :thumbup:

[Tymbark]

I like billateral alliterations, and you've got one sweet darkness/danger

BTW I'm not native english speaker, so I'm not sure the term I used is "translatable" to your language in that way... anyway, congrats and keep writing:thumbsup:

[lAmebAdger]

good poem, that one would have taken me a whole afternoon (I'm a lazy bag of stool)!

hope you make more

[Elly]

I liked it. I can't critique it however as I don't know the first thing about poetry but, as they say, I know what I like.

[stillman]

Much much better than the "I can see what you see not" one from d1.

[Tragedian]

Very nice. I like it a lot. You have quite a bit of creativity.

[Illulaguill]

Wow, that was great. Not all emo s bad, by the way; after all, isnt emo supposed to be "emotional"? This poem showed a lot of that, for sure. Good job, a tad drawn out. 7/10
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[Cormac McArt]

Fine poem , too sad this guys dropped only one post. :(

[sunkenfaith]

Nice first post! Hope to see more of it coming.