The Throne Room

[Gun Doc]

The Throne Room

It is the Ancients who have guided me here,
I must feel no doubt, no hesitation... no fear.

I must be ready to make my stand,
For the hero will come with a steady hand.

In this chamber I will conquer them all,
One by one, they each will fall.

I will torment his flesh and weaken his desire,
I will curse his mind and burn him with fire.

My shout and my strength will win this day,
Each swing of my axe a monster I will slay.

Our numbers will overpower and by force we will win,
He will forever regret committing this sin.

They have no group that can withstand my attack,
I must continue to knock them back.

I must not lose ground to this mortal creation,
I must not forget my masters frustration.

They are many but I must not give in,
I command this battle and I demand to win.

He proved to strong for my attempt,
It will be up to my brothers for my life is spent.

I must keep my focus and the upper hand,
Evil is retreating from this blood stained land.

The last line of my master defense,
My destruction must dispense.

None are standing and I did not fall,
For it is I who has overpowered them all.

A minor victory he has made,
Surely this day he will enter his grave.

Through this portal their master dwells,
beyond this throne his hatred swells.
Ancients who guide me hear me now,
I have beaten them all though I do not know how.
Give me the might I need to win,
For the greatest evil still lies within.
Dawn me now with the blessing of battle...

[Ian4602]

Really like it -- just one thought: should there be a third text colour?
-Ian

[proudfoot]

That's pretty cool. Orange = player character, Red = random demon, or am I misinterpreting?

Good writing!

[Üdorim]

That's pretty cool. Orange = player character, Red = random demon, or am I misinterpreting?

Good writing!

No no, this is the Throne Room or whatever before Baal, I'm pretty sure. Anyway, there were a couple lines with off kilter verse but at least it appeared to have been spellchecked so :thumbsup: .

[Gun Doc]

No no, this is the Throne Room or whatever before Baal, I'm pretty sure. Anyway, there were a couple lines with off kilter verse but at least it appeared to have been spellchecked so :thumbsup: .

I didn't think it was possible to be off kilter in a poem but thanks for noticing the correct spelling.

[Gun Doc]

Really like it -- just one thought: should there be a third text colour?
-Ian

I thought about it but it reads fine the way it is I think. I should have left out text color all together but...

[Gun Doc]

That's pretty cool. Orange = player character, Red = random demon, or am I misinterpreting?

Good writing!

As I mentioned above, I should have left out text color. It reads how it reads. Thanks for the compliment.

[tamrend]

No no, this is the Throne Room or whatever before Baal, I'm pretty sure. Anyway, there were a couple lines with off kilter verse but at least it appeared to have been spellchecked so :thumbsup: .

I think he's talking about meter. This poem doesn't really follow a meter.

IT is the ANcients WHO have GUIDed me HERE,

Capitals indicate stressed syllables. The meter actually seems random to me. Of course, the importance of meter depends on who you ask, but hombres like Shakespeare was rather fond of it. I'm studying it as a way to add diversity and flexibility to my prose.

[Üdorim]

I think he's talking about meter. This poem doesn't really follow a meter.

IT is the ANcients WHO have GUIDed me HERE,

Capitals indicate stressed syllables. The meter actually seems random to me. Of course, the importance of meter depends on who you ask, but hombres like Shakespeare was rather fond of it. I'm studying it as a way to add diversity and flexibility to my prose.

Err, yes, I did mean meter. Thankyou.

"...Rime being no necessary Adjunct or true Ornament of Poem or good Verse, in longer Works especially, but the Invention of a barbarous age, to set off wretched matter and lame Meeter; grac't indeed since by the use of some famous modern Poets, carried away by Custom, but much to thir own vexation, hindrance, and constraint, to express many things otherwise, and for the most part worse than else they would have exprest them. ... [our best English Tragedies consist only of] apt Numbers, fit quantity of Syllables, and the sense variously drawn out from one verse into another, not in the jingling sound of like endings, a fault avoyded by the learned Ancients both in Poetry and all good Oratory."

- Paradise Lost, 1669

I love that quote. And I'm told that Shakespeare's later works did not rhyme at all, but I'm neither a fan nor have been required to study him very much so I haven't even bothered to verify.

Which is not to really say anything at all; the poem is still very throne-ish.

Though your 8th stanza requires an apostrophe like so:

"I must not forget my master's frustration." At least, I think it does.

I'm not sure there were seven champions before you fought Baal (as there are seven stanzas from monsters) but I could be wrong, and then again I could be wrong about the whole Baal thing in any event. Not that, again, it matters.

Would be cool if there was a line or two from the ancients as well, maybe bestowing their blessings. Or that's possibly another poem. "I love the taste of experience points in the morning."

[Gun Doc]

I sometimes prefer to rhyme. It's fun and presents a challenge. It also makes a poem kinda catchy.

I have no idea what meter is... :scratch: